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04-21-04, 04:20 PM | #1 | ||||
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Already Dead Inside
IP: 4C8F 0F5D
So That's It, Fuck Im Past 'Bliss-Filled'
Spines Kinked Still From 'Pink-Pills' I Think Ill Thoughts While I Dream An While Im Awake My Brain Cant Stop The Schemes From Brewin Up Through Seams With Hate This Fiend Just Waits Till The Day I Can't Create A Perfect View Of What Every Emcee Should Be An State Thats Not Already In Me & U Wait Now Ive Become A Destructive Mate Slumped In A Chair An Cant Function Staring Out The Window, Its Just A Visual Consumption Im Eight-Teen An Can't Say, Look I See Somthin It's Just A Bird But I Believe I Can Fly It's Just A Word But I Believe I Should Die It's Just My World An I See It Through Your Eyes I Wish I Could Believe In My True Self Like You Believe In Your Lies An Even Though I Try There Are Voices In My Head On The Daily Choices I Made Made A Medly Of My Life & Mixed It Up So Bad I Cant Hate Me I Need To Develope My Way Through This Sick An Twisted Passage Its All Irrellevant When U Think About It We All Gunna End Up In A Casket Fuck It Give Me A Glock So I Can Go Out Blastin Its All Im Askin Trying To Turn My Life In To A Porno Movie With A Little Bit Of Action I Can't Feel My Legs No More Im In Some Sort Of Passive State Man These Psycho Thraputic Drugs Are Fuckin Great An Hypno Therapy Had Me Making A Bloody Mess Repressed Aggression Let Loose Is Lovely Yes Im Here To Make You Think About The Hate On Each One Of Ur Chests An Yes Its All Over You Can Kill Me Im Already Dead But Blessed *Something I Wrote While I Was Bored* lol
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04-21-04, 05:52 PM | #2 | |||||||
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coo nice poem........i liked it ..all i can say is nice work dp.....
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04-21-04, 05:54 PM | #3 | ||||
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Thanks Appriciate The Posotive FeedBack CreaTiviTie!! ...
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04-21-04, 07:44 PM | #4 | ||||
RV SPOTLIGHT, GET AT ME!
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thats ill girl for real, the thing is i just went to a funeral so i was just comtemplating some deep shit earlier, you definitely are on that level that i was today.
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04-21-04, 07:46 PM | #5 | ||||
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Thanks VanGo' Hope Everything Went Well' ..! My Apology'z!!!!
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04-21-04, 10:02 PM | #6 | |||||||
Artist, that simple
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Damn gurl that shit was mad hot. Keep them poems coming. Oh, why is my name on the end of your respect list. Come on now shorty?
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04-22-04, 09:02 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: DAA3 2944
good shit very deep i almost got lost in ur wordz
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04-22-04, 09:08 PM | #8 | ||||
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Thanks G' Duece' Appriciate It...!! Thanks Unknown Assasin' ..!! lol.. Sorry' Bout Dat' ..!!
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04-22-04, 09:51 PM | #9 | |||||
retired.
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IP: 75F5 BDD1
Not bad... the problem is that it doesn't flow that well in most places, from line to line.. there is sort of a huge disconnect... also sometimes it seemed you forced a rhyme by going with odd word choice, which you really don't need to do. Not perfect, but I'm definetely feeling the emotion.
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04-22-04, 10:35 PM | #10 | ||||
yawn
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G your name just fits... its short. But anyways. This shit is hot, and it could have been put on a beat, it could be an open mic or a poem. Really good shit... I'm happy to see a nother good poetry head here.
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04-25-04, 03:23 AM | #11 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 3220 75B9
se poetry doesnt have 2 flow kd
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05-03-04, 07:41 PM | #12 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: DAA3 2944
good shit dp keep up tha work
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05-03-04, 07:44 PM | #13 | ||||
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Thanks Lot' .. And The Rest Of Ya'll.. Appriciate The Positive FeedBack For Real Good Looking Out!! !!!
-Highly Appriciated-
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05-04-04, 02:17 PM | #14 | |||||
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** Me Aswell .... lol!
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