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Old 05-14-04, 05:53 PM   #1
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Snappn' off a cold one//
You better fold son//
Cause your cards aint shit and You can't gimme a real run//

I got a pair of aces stacked as a matter of fact//
And I'll take your whack jacks and shove em' right up your crack//

You better speak when your spoken too//
Plead when I'm chokin' you//
You better have my money or I'll be fuking smokin' you//

You took your chances bitch//
You went and made me rich//
T Bag spends your money while your baby mama sucks his dick//
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Old 05-14-04, 06:49 PM   #2
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the flow was nice but you need to make sure the bars all have similar legnths (around the same number of syllables) it flows better that way. Overall it was pretty good. my favorite line was the aces and the jacks line.
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