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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

yo ure a hater ure mumma be a masterbater on my jed she leave it red i pump u with led ure plans to be a trans sexual are so intellexual that u dont understand them yourself.im sitting on a big pile of chedda but ure sitting on the cheese off plz ure hair full of grease do u wash i used to think u were posh but your just nosh u have no dosh. im about to stab u with a rusty blade u will go a nasty shade of blue just think wot i can do to u.

lol this same spit he just spat at me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Yo you a dumbass gavin,
cause i found out u used the same verse last time you were battlin,
your the only person i know,
who uses the same flow,
so everybody go,
and check out his last battle agenst eric89,
this dumbfuck had the nerve to use the same rhyme,
and even if that rhyme was tight,
you couldent use it twice,
cause its not good dog its anything but nice,
and is gettin you fucked over more than heidie flice,
so think about what your doin next time you rhyme,
cause even if you posted good shit it couldent beat mine.

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

first of all decent spit lyricle and gavin what the fuck u thinkin spittin same thing twice. u cant do that incase u didnt know. u both need to elevate so jus keep working on it. my vote goes to lyrical by a mudslide.

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

gavin i thought you verse was weak. it dosen't matter to me if you recy. it still sucked. youe structure was terrible:total flow 2/10

solja your flow was alrigth. i still think you need to elavate in this game. nice punches though and nice structure. try incorporatin mult's in to your shit though. total flow: 6/10.return the fava.......

vote=solja

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THIS RAP SHIT IS NOT A GAME CRAZE

I GOT THE ARTILERY THAT AH RING YAH HEAD 4 DAYS

SO ONLY COME AT ME PROPER IF YOU DON'T WANT TO RAP LIKE MACE

WEll shit gavin if it didn't work the first time I don't know why you would try it again. No that it would matter judging by yoru style Lyrical would have still ripped ya. Better punches, flow opener closer everywhich way. Try putting yoru stuff into a more bar like structure and cut down on the wordiness Gavin.

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

Flow:
Personals: Lyric
Punches: Lyric
Complexity: Neither
Wordplay: Neither
Creativity: Lyric
Structure: Lyric

Aight, The Battle Was Weak To Be Truthful. Gavin Had No Structure, Flow, Punches, Or Anything. His Verse Was A Mess. Gavin Try To At Least Bar Off Ya Verse So cats Can follow It When The Readin it, Feel Me.
Lyric's Was Aight, But Yo, Try To Even Ya Lines Out A Little. Cuz You Had A Couple Long Lines And Then A Whole Bunch Of Short Ones. The Flow Is Always Better If The Lines Are Similar In Length.
Also, Both Yall Need To Have More Punches, Cuz That's What Makes The Other Guy Look Dumb. Both Yall Keep Workin.


VOTE: LYRICELSOLJA

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.