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Old 08-12-04, 12:24 AM   #1
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"This Diss" Freestyle

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Thsi is a freestyle check it out i made it on this one guy i dont think i need to tell him yer name. ight check this shit out. and i rap it to the beat rap game by d12



I rap with the maddest fast speed/
I don’t do it all just for my own greed/.
So when I hit you with this diss you will be the one that bleeds/
So ill be sayin yer done with this diss and ill be feedin/.
You with all of this to your face and I never miss/
So don’t ever tell me to say it with a greater hiss/.
Or I will make the longer remix to this/
So im gonna just go for a few sec and take a 10 second piss/.
At yer mutha fucken gay ass place/
So you betta sut up and you betta be makin space/.
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Old 08-12-04, 12:26 AM   #2
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Old 08-12-04, 01:12 AM   #3
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its kinda chesy tho lol haha but its freestyle from me
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Old 08-12-04, 01:34 AM   #4
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kinda short, don't really think it should be a open mic,
should be freestyle cypher if there is one,

anywho

it was alright for the most part, rhymes were kinda basic
vocab coulda been better
flow was good for the most part

to be honest, it coulda been better
but as you said, it was a freestyle so not much i can really say

props

peace
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Old 08-12-04, 01:40 AM   #5
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thanks ya i didnt think it was great eather i just thought how about lets see if they like it lol
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Old 08-12-04, 01:45 AM   #6
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not bad well let me drop this piece right here

Got bazaar splendor like a bartender add a glad dash
Of brandy keep my cash handy but duck the sad trash
Sugar cums in layer like a plumb player with girl squeeze
Waist and seize lace even make bees chase and twirl these
Honeycombs, rip apart freaks and mark with streaks of chalk
Intertwine with winter wines come out drunk too weak to walk
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Old 08-12-04, 04:31 AM   #7
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if that was freestyle that was rank man i mean rank as in alright this is what i give you.
k i was rappin this to i smell pussy goin fast and this is what i give you
flow 6/10
wordplay but you used kinda cheesy word 6/10
punches 4/10
overall 5 1/2
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Old 08-12-04, 06:22 AM   #8
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this diss sucked

4/10
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Old 08-12-04, 08:56 AM   #9
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haha you keep given me 4 and the last song i made was 4 and it was better so what is it then?
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Old 08-12-04, 10:01 AM   #10
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Old 08-13-04, 01:05 AM   #11
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shit was iite i have seen better
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Old 08-13-04, 02:21 AM   #12
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ya same man im not the best but man its freestyle still by a guy who just atarted spitin rhymes like 2 and a half weaks ago lol and gettin better everyday in like 1 month i bet i will have more wins then losses
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