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<UzI> has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-14-04 11:37 AM.

ShackleS has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-14-04 11:39 AM.

Chek dis
Im gonna weigh u down and smoke ya like a ounce,
Got u in my sights now im gonna pounce,
Cos dis is a lyrical genocide-Poison ya mind wid cyanide,
Shall i crush u physically?Mentally?Or lyrically?
Go back 2 skool and learn ur basic physickz,
U come bare-foot like fred flintstone-Cause of death still no-1 knowz,Gonna whip me wid yo' pistol-Kill ur flowz wid my crossbow,
Coz i move thru tha third-world,My third eyes tha guidin light-Come bitch invite a fight,Coz we all gonna muthafuckin die 2nite-Crunch time in tha first quarter,From tha worst slaughter-coz u poisinin my holy water-Y son challenge?U gonna get merked-Like i was elmo and u was big bird,C i munched u up and shit u out Turd-Mite as well call u a lame ass herb -So stop dere dont say a word-Plz we dont wanna hear anutha verb-WORD-

~this guy's uzi well his clips dun work he's defective~
~This guys rhymes are like medicine to cure A.I.D's, non-affective~

~He couldn't flow if he was made out of water~
~this battle's like tha jews in world war 2, he's gettin slaughtered~

~Stupid Cowards hitten soft blows like fluffy pink pillows~
~This weak-ass emcee's a coward, like corn he's nothin but yellow~

~He doesn't know a thing how's he gonna compete~
~hitten lines that we pre witten, like re-runs and repeats~

~your like a plastic cup because i can see right through you~
~This guys strokin more balls than tha end of billard's cue~

~this guy's uzi well his clips dun work he's defective~
~This guys rhymes are like medicine to cure A.I.D's, non-affective~

~He couldn't flow if he was made out of water~
~this battle's like tha jews in world war 2, he's gettin slaughtered~

~Stupid Cowards hitten soft blows like fluffy pink pillows~
~This weak-ass emcee's a coward, like corn he's nothin but yellow~

~He doesn't know a thing how's he gonna compete~
~hitten lines that we pre witten, like re-runs and repeats~

~your like a plastic cup because i can see right through you~
~This guys strokin more balls than tha end of billard's cue

decent battle by both, preferred the structure of shakles' though. no beef uzi, but yours was kinda hard to read.

Voted For: ShackleS

opener - Shackles, wasnt feeling Uzi's, played
closer - Shackles, hahaha...funny shit man
punches - Shackles, Uzi's were weak
personals - Neither, didnt really see anything good
multis - Uzi, Shackles didnt have any
metas - Shackles, had one in almost every bar
structure - Shackles, A lot cleaner + easier to read
vocab - Shackles, he had a consistantly moderate vocab

Shackles: You took this one dawg. One of the neatest structured verses I've seen in a while. Plus you used so many metaphors, that gave your overall verse a good look. Vocab was consitant and punches were hard and effective. Great job. Just work on personals and multis because I didnt really see either of them in this verse man, elevate in those areas.

Uzi: I think you need some elevating to do in these areas...
Personals...I didnt really see any in your verse.
openers/closers...coulda been way better than you did.
vocab...was alright but also coulda been better
metas...didnt really see anything good in your verse.
-You gotta make your verses less self-glorifying because thats what you did for the most part of your spit...
ppl dont wanna listen about how good you are...we wanna see an actual battle, your supposed to be dissing your opponent. When you did attemp to diss Shackles, I feel your punches were weak and didnt pull through...theres another area to work on.

PLEASE GIVE AN HOUNEST VOTE AS I DID FOR YOU... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...496068&posted=1

Uppin ^&^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: ShackleS

I'ma give my vote to ShackleS 'cuz his punches were hittin' more and he kept his rhyming consistent. UzI, most of your lines didn't even rhyme with the one before - you kept trying to swtich it up in mid-line. No hate though, good battle.
Vote - ShackleS

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