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Old 06-27-04, 01:43 AM   #1
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Exclamation my 1st free style

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My rhymes are corrosive
My flow is explossive
The best of BX in case you dont know this
Treat you lil bitches like trash
I got yall so scared u hidin in garbage bags
You fuckin fag
Faggot You cant touch me
My rhymes go at You so fast you can't see
After I'm done you can't speak
You messin with tha fatal 1
After I slice you you'll be prayin to god, son
Shit I aint done
Come at me I cut punk ass bitches for fun
you faggots betta run
If u can't get your hands on a gun
Cas I can't stop
you'll drop
straight plup
You'll fall this is war
Smoke you lil cowards like blunts
And i aint even done yet
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Old 06-27-04, 11:36 AM   #2
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Wack Wack and wack and wack oh did i forget wack? ^^
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Old 06-27-04, 12:40 PM   #3
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You need to elevate but stick around, check out some other OM's and you'll get better
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Old 06-27-04, 12:49 PM   #4
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yea. work on your word play n shit son.

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Old 06-27-04, 04:34 PM   #5
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To: Young01/wanna battle? lol

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ya rhymez are corrosive, n yeah you explosive/ but I'm smokin'/ as I get promoted/ ta top dawg/ you frum BX, I'm frum Phoenix/ not Arizona..I'm talkin' bout tha block, I'm frum Cali son, n my heat pops off/ hidin' in garbage bags? nigga you drag, on tha end of my nutts, first fa first freestyle homie, ya gotta work ta come up..you bluff, sayin' you'll toke me likah blunt, you betta shut up..you got madd dellusion, how many times you done drugs? how many words you seein'?/ from these lyricz that I'm typin', I'm tha illest net battler, try ta come up off me, I'll leave ya like Jack tha Ripper, woulda..you ain't as ill as me, no New Yorker/ will ever be/ from tha top of tha World Trade, ta tha fuckin' Atlantic sea/ homie..how fatal can you be, typin' words on'a screen? You'll never kill me, ya rhymes are weak, ya speech iz bleak, n its all "blah blah.."/ ain't nothin' I ain't ever heard, you just anotha flaw/ bout ta get scrapped off, tha street/ or rather tha internet...nobody wants ta read ya rhymes..cuz they love the WEST!!

WESTCOAST BYOTCH!!!!
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Old 06-27-04, 08:49 PM   #6
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thanks 4 the feed back and honesty appreciate it.I can only get betta.
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Old 06-27-04, 09:11 PM   #7
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put more words in each line its too short to find a punch & shit like
that anywayz stay up and elevate!

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Old 06-27-04, 10:05 PM   #8
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ya son dont get down homiee .. obviously new to this but we all were at one time or another .. keep spittin and keep reading .. read the cats who are really good on this site (not many) .. and learn from them .. try to work on wordplay, similies, metahz, etc .

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Old 06-28-04, 02:49 AM   #9
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Yeah i know...but oh wells..

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Its okay Young...didn't know that you didn't wanna battle...but if thats your pic i saw...dayum girl your fiiiiine!!!!! hehe! and yeah..you can get better...and Metah, I'll go to the good people on this site...but how can you be an MC at all..and not know how to rhyme worth a shit...I mean common..I have fuckin' experience...i ain't just some new kat off the street who never used a computer or never flowed before...I'mma savage dawg...i thought you knew...oh yeah and Young i got you on yahoo too...so holla at me sometime aiight...lates.

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