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07-13-04, 05:33 AM | #1 | ||||||
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jus some shit i wrote a while back...
if im so wise then why does my heart cry why does my soul have to rot away and die you say im smart and ive got all the answers then why is my flesh eating itself alive like cancer if im so wise then why do you want me to change why do you want my whole lifestyle rearranged why do you want part of me dead why do i keep listening to these voices in my head if im so wise then why do i constantly relive the past why do so many things feel like a pain in the ass why does my life have to be harder than yours trust me it is cuz i know all the scores its your story additional ornaments arent needed nothing left to do with my inner anger other than feed it if im so wise why is my life a constant struggle people keep throwing more shit at me to juggle hidden feelings once kept inside of me are out i just got sick of hearing them scream and shout i cant take anymore of this i cant go on why does everything about this seem so wrong thats it im done i cant fight it anymore watch the fuck out bitch here comes the gore |
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07-13-04, 03:40 PM | #2 | |||||
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this was emotional man,nice piece, seems like your goin thru an inner struggle, i liked your use of words, detailed and i guess some questions cant be answered bro.....or it takes a lifetime to figure out....keep it up....peace
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07-16-04, 02:33 AM | #3 | ||||||
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nice drop kidd...had alot of emotion...really liked da part when u asked all the why's but like fluidmoon said...some questions can't be answered...juss gotta take what life gives u...but ya...nice drop...keep dat comin...peace
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07-16-04, 05:03 AM | #4 | ||||||
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that's hot way to go
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07-16-04, 12:43 PM | #5 | ||||||||
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That was my favorite line out of the whole peice...mostly becauase its really deep and I can relate. Each of your stanzas had the AA BB type of rhyme scheme and I believe it worked out nicely for it...keep on posting!
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