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Old 07-03-04, 11:02 PM   #1
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J-limit Productions Presents


Mjust23 With The Hit Single "done" Blowin Up Everwhere On Cali Mixtapes.

Take It To Em Dogg.


Verse 1(mjust23)
Spittin With Precise Aim, Cali Famous, Uppin For Word Wide Fame//
Killin Niggas With 5 Records, Damn Its Shame,u Dont No Me Now But After I Spray, U Gonna Remember Ma Name//
I Dont Spit For Club Joints, Im All Street, I Dont Got Girl Trouble So I Dont Beat Ma Meat//
I Dont Produce Cold Records, All Ma Shit Is Heat//
Niggas Front On Stage But Pussy Off//
Ask Anybody In Da Hood, Dem Niggas Is Soft//
Blowin Up Like A Balloon,i Call Soft Niggas Fruit Of The Loom//
Make Sure U No After U Hear That Boom, Dem Niggas Safely Locked In A Tomb.

Hook(3x)
This Shit Is Forever Done//
Boom Blast Niggas No Im Da One//
Its Done.

Verse 2(mjust23)
Ma Niggas Bust 2 Rounds And Laugh, Duck Wen U See Us Cause We Bout To Blast//
Wen We Get Bored We Pop Rivals To Let Time Past//
Shit Im Gansta Like Brando//
Im Bored Lets Get Trina, Dat Damn Ho
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Old 07-03-04, 11:14 PM   #2
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Old 07-03-04, 11:17 PM   #3
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this was an ok open mic... the 2nd verse is way too short.. and the first verse could be a little longer too.. but overall this was an ok open mic
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Old 07-03-04, 11:29 PM   #4
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the reason its short is because its a mixtape song i did and they e all ways short, the song is 3:23 long but the beat and people talkin make it longer
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Old 07-03-04, 11:31 PM   #5
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filler song then
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Old 07-04-04, 12:07 AM   #6
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thats pretty hott man just link the things togetherr its all over the place..yet the flow and rhymes were there..good stuff..
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Old 07-04-04, 12:12 AM   #7
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nice spit fam..liked da flow and rhymes scheme of the verse
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Old 07-04-04, 12:36 AM   #8
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MJ this was a dope open mic although you didn't follow the suggestions. Just work on the suggestions and your open mic's will sound/look way better than usual.
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Old 07-04-04, 03:03 AM   #9
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Old 07-04-04, 03:39 AM   #10
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Well...this was an a'ight open mic. You need to work on structure length...and verse consistancy. Your rhyme scheme was a'ight...but I saw a lot of forced multies in there...overall...a'ight piece.
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Old 07-04-04, 03:53 AM   #11
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Well...this was an a'ight open mic. You need to work on structure length...and verse consistancy. Your rhyme scheme was a'ight...but I saw a lot of forced multies in there...overall...a'ight piece.


Agreed. structure and consistancy could use a little polishin for sure. Not a bad drop - prolly sounds better in audio than it looks in text. I ain't heard of J-Limit productions - ya'll got a soundclick page?
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Old 07-04-04, 03:55 AM   #12
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we operate in the mixtape labs on compton in cali, no website
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Old 07-04-04, 04:13 AM   #13
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iight this was a pretty good open mic... i liked the flow..and the sequence but your really need to work on your structure that really through your open mic out it made it hard to read ... but yet it was still good

please feed back in the open mic in my sig
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Old 07-04-04, 03:05 PM   #14
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i thought it was alrite, ya the 2nd verse was a little short but the rest was pretty good, keep write'n
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Old 07-04-04, 03:09 PM   #15
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dont you think sumone will take yo flows and use it.
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