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07-17-04, 06:34 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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Remember Me
IP: 3240 794D
I WANNA B REMEMBERED LIKE DA WATTS RIOT
LIKE RIDIN A BIKE OR SHOE WHEN U FIRST TIE IT ALL OVER DA NATION LIKE MARTIN HAVIN A DREAM OR WILT CHAMBERLAIN SCORIN A HUNDRED POINTS MAKIN DA CROWD SKREAM OR WUT ABOUT WHEN BIGGIE A TUPAC GOT SHOT DA SAME WIT JAM MASTER JAY AND SOULJA SLIM GOT POPPED I WANNA MAKE MYSELF A NAME CLIMB STAIRS OF FAME LEAVE DA MEMORY IN PEOPLES HEAD 2 PLAY OVER AGAIN KUZ JUST 2 BE 4GOTTEN WILL MAKE ME WANNA CRY SITTIN IN A DARK CORNER 4 ETERNITY ASKING Y |
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07-17-04, 09:56 PM
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Jumpin' Along
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IP: C56C 93CC
that was weak and i really didnt like the color you were writing in..
it had some nice flow... the structure.. was off at times... but overall it was pretty weak
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07-18-04, 12:02 AM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 4289 77F4
ok, you could have put a tad more into this, but it was good for what it was, and i liked it, it didnt need complexity because it was how you felt at the time..and thats what matters....keep at it
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07-18-04, 09:51 AM
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IP: E265 E924
it was ok, content was aight, spelling and font..not so good
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