i only have to spit a bar or two\there's no need to explain\ my niggas know how young SHY do\ I'm styling with the jewles that match my shoes\and my eyes the same color as my air force two's\ i got a outfit to match everyday of the week\ when im around bitches know they forbiden to speak\go againt my word then they hit with the heat\gripping the piece\flipping your jeep\ hungry so im fienen to eat\when you spell it out \yeah motherfucker it's TAZ\ aint a game when the clippers plugged and the chair hiked up\leave your face like a swosh\nigga all niked up\ you see me in the street\with my face up side down\stay in your place it aint safe nigga ask around\ before i leave your people a victim of the face mask and pound\ body decomposed so they think he drowned\ and it's fucked up cause he tried so hard to be down\ Now his ass MIA no where to be found\ Born condemed to sin is my Karma\ angry bitch walking niggas better rock body armor\ stressed by lifes daily events\and spitting is the only think that helps me vent\ i rock migrans like i rock my dubes\dreams so deep i could flip them to movies\niggas around here mad cause they mouth don't move\and the only way to get rid of me is if you shoot me\cause im still going to leave regardless to what you do to me\

You need to come up with a better structure.Don't write it in one paragraph because its hard to follow the flow...

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i agree

u got bad structure like me but u got raw rhymes so if u want in my newb crew come join

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WHO THE FUCK CAN YOU GO AND DISS SOMEONE WITH A RECORD LIKE THAT...
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lol~at riff raff~~givin dem a hard time lol~~~your structure is kind of fucked tho~~do it like this

blah blah blah blah blah blah blah cat/
blah blah blah blah blah blah blah hat/

not actually like that wit dem rhymes cuz if u do ima have 2 fuck u up 4 bein that dumb~~but u SHOULD get the point~~dont do a verse in a paragraph ur eyez get lost and u dont b concentratin on da lyrics u just b concentration on what fuckin line your on~~if you can fix that then try out here

http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...343#post1433343

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