aight, check in, and agree on a time to spit, I'm thinkin' a 3:00 pm eastern time drop.

NO crew d/r or hate votes.
Ima go prolly 5-8 bars
whateva, check in then we'll drop at the same time.

-CJ-

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yo ima check in right now.................... Uppin' for your ass to check the fuck in...............

-CJ-

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spit by 3:30 Eastern Time, since I see you just got in here.

-CJ-

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Fuck it I'll drop right now.

Lyondreds? Rastafarian, you need toquit playin', Bob Marley your not,
Looks like I took out the Sheriff, and I Didn't even hafta bust a shot.
I know you don't smoke buddah, fake you know about the lion of judah,
I'm know to expose fakes, like a security guard sayin' "We have an intruder"
You don't belong, we can see you're a "retarted" genius, you even spelt it wrong,
That's why I'm summer Schooling you, I didn't want you to get sonned to long.
Oh, well, I tried but I guess I couldn't have my cake and eat it too,
But I've aquired a taste for M.C.z, guess I'll settle for eatin' you.
It's alright, maybe you just liked the dreadlocks, and your sign was leo,
Or maybe it was predicted that you were destined to be Jamaican, by Miss Cleo.
Your style like you sellin' girl scout cookies, open the door and say "we ain't buyin'",
Must like 50, your raps will never get your rich, but i guess you'll die tryin'.

-CJ-

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uppin' for your verse
quit playin' nigga.

-CJ-

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raw material, versus WAR material....

how you murderproof and your screen door is wide open //
I know white boys harder then you, so stop Locin //
ive been touched with an golden hand // no respect for man //
if I have to kill you, ill do it again //
im lookin for.........a lionist.......... so hardcore....... I got hickes on my mic.....and still you want it raw, //
this is war material, I could tell you fragile, //
fuk pullin a trigga I rather throw a bullet at you // then dismiss you, this net wont miss you //
! miss cleo said to quit rap and go back to kissin dudes !

5-8 bars mann fuk it I still scorched you //

Way to feed off my verse, and still have fucked up structure, and then talk shit. Uppin' 4 Votes ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

-CJ-

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Raw don't sweat the small stuff man,

Opener- Raw
Closer- Raw
Multi's- Raw, no real good ones though
Flow- Both of you need to elivate here
Personals- None to speak of
Punches- Raw takes this
Wordplay- Elivate
Creativity-Eliavate not bad Raw
Originaliy- Elivate

DEDUCTIONS
Bite'n-
Feed'n- LYon a little but don't worry bout
Overtime-
Over bar limit-
Other-


Overall- No big surprises, just one emcee beat another emcee straight up. Ly you need to work on your punches and content if your gonna shorten the verse by a couple verse make sure you have some sick ass barz.

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And return the favor click on the link below or look for it in Front lines.

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Uppin Votes Please,
3 Votes Thats It
Lets Get This Poppin

Yo Raw Material Was More Complex And Had A Tighter Structure
Lyondead Sorry Lyondreds Seemed To Be Strugling



*check Marx Vs Slugga On Page 2 Giv Me Sum Votes*

Uppin' for votes............................................. ....................

-CJ-

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overall i think that both were okay but raw had better punches and a better structure. lyon work on those two things and you will improve aight.
vote/raw material

yo return the favor and drop an honest vote here http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135995

~one xplicit