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Old 08-04-04, 12:23 AM   #1
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Keystylin'
Title: Burying a Nigga

What up my niggas, y'all niggas don't have a clue
Nigga do you have some paper I could borrow?
What nigga? You going back to school
Nigga fuck you! Nigga chill, damn you my man!
Understand my nigger,
I'm broke as fuck I'm tired of these fucking food stamps
Nigga where's the weed?!
This niggas on some shit! I thought you were broke?
This nigga trying to play the kid!
My nigga I only have, for the dutch and the 'dro
You could get some of that. Yeah that's my nigga for sho
Damn homie isn't that, that nigga you have beef with
Yeah he fucked my bitch, that nigga think that shits a secret
I fucked her, she was crying snitching on that nigger
Imma pop this motherfucker on some "Nigger Run" shit
Don't you love this fucking street shit ain't it fun bitch
"Whoop, whoop" Nigga that's beast run toss the glock
"Whoop" Nigger Stop! "Pop"
Why my black people we're buried as "just another nigger on the block"?

Stop!

That was just keystyling but let me know what y'all think!
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Old 08-04-04, 12:48 AM   #2
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fix ya structure...rymin words should be in simular spots from the first line ta the second...i don't like personally reading shit that says nigga 50 times but if thats your style then w/e...pretty basic n played topic but you did it ok...
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Old 08-04-04, 12:57 AM   #3
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Barz&Penstripes
Keystylin'
Title: Burying a Nigga

What up my niggas, y'all niggas don't have a clue
Nigga do you have some paper I could borrow?
What nigga? You going back to school
Nigga fuck you! Nigga chill, damn you my man!
Understand my nigger,
I'm broke as fuck I'm tired of these fucking food stamps
Nigga where's the weed?!
This niggas on some shit! I thought you were broke?
This nigga trying to play the kid!
My nigga I only have, for the dutch and the 'dro
You could get some of that. Yeah that's my nigga for sho
Damn homie isn't that, that nigga you have beef with
Yeah he fucked my bitch, that nigga think that shits a secret
I fucked her, she was crying snitching on that nigger
Imma pop this motherfucker on some "Nigger Run" shit
Don't you love this fucking street shit ain't it fun bitch
"Whoop, whoop" Nigga that's beast run toss the glock
"Whoop" Nigger Stop! "Pop"
Why my black people we're buried as "just another nigger on the block"?

Stop!

That was just keystyling but let me know what y'all think!
Peace


Yea So Um.. The Bold Pretty Much Somes Up The Problem
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Old 08-04-04, 01:09 AM   #4
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Thanx for the comments! The whole rhyme was pretty much about how people use the word nigga too much in their rhymes and it's not necessary -- In Fact after a while its offensive. So at the end of the rhyme - I was like why are we buried just s niggas? It's not right!

But thank you people. Much love for the comments. It served a deeper purpose for real!

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Old 08-04-04, 01:56 AM   #5
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No one else on Rap Battles can use Niggas in their Rymes. Bars&PenStripes has Just played it OUt.

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Yea So Um.. The Bold Pretty Much Somes Up The Problem


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Old 08-04-04, 03:15 AM   #6
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ya but he was tryin ta make a point....i got it now ..i did'nt at first ta tell ya the truth...i jus thought he was using it as a filler..lol..."its always been played though"
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Old 08-04-04, 04:18 AM   #7
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1/10 that was wack structure was awful same wit vocab elevate
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