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| View Poll Results: One-Man-Band vs ArchAngel | |||
| One-Man-Band |
  
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1 | 16.67% |
| - ArchAngel - |
  
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5 | 83.33% |
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08-25-04, 04:04 AM
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Jumpin' Along
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One-Man-Band vs - ArchAngel -
IP: C56C 93CC
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UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic : Home Sickness Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-25-04 at 04:34 AM Must drop verse in 40 minutes after check in. |
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08-25-04, 04:09 AM
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#2
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IP: C56C 93CC
- ArchAngel - has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-25-04 04:09 AM.
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08-25-04, 04:14 AM
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#3
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IP: 48EA 7C3F
One-Man-Band has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-25-04 04:14 AM.
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08-25-04, 04:19 AM
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#4
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Jumpin' Along
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IP: C56C 93CC
I can't survive, everything I built is seeming to collide.. Surrounded by hate, and thoughts of suicide.. My household is full of arguements and non-stop bullshit.. The only thing worse than hell, is constantly livin' in it.. Get my hopes up listenin' to all these fictional stories.. My girl may be Workin alot, but she's always been they for me I love her to death for her words of wisdom and personality.. Maybe one day, she'll help scare the demons outta me.. She's been like a sister, persistent and quick to help.. All the times she saved me from puttin' my life on the shelf.. She disliked my friends, but sure as hell hated my enemies.. If it wasn't for her, I probably wouldn't even be an MC.. Would've given it up, along with this life I live.. But, somehow she made good from all my sins.. I've felt lonely for years, never thought anyone could understand But, that disolved the first time I started holdin' her hand.. Felt the love, every kiss is precious and frozen.. Stuck in time, and I leave my heart open for the moment.. Like that bunny, kept me goin' when I was low on energy.. Even though I'm a fuck up, I know my little sister envies me.. She see behind the paint, behind my disguise.. Takes the time to see the individual behind my eyes.. Lookin' up to me, and I can't even be a decent role model.. Instead I surround my life with marijuana and Tequila bottles.. --Chorus-- I got home sickness, and I don't know where to go.. All I see are poisonous clouds, acid rain and black snow.. Just for today,I'm beggin' to have something to come home to And, I never knew what I had, until the day that I found you.. Wishin' for someone to understand that I'm a man.. I need more than for somebody to hold my hand.. In need of guidance and supervision to what I'm witnessin'.. A broken home, and there's always hate under any condition.. --Verse 2-- Grandma, how ya' doin'? My life has gone to hell.. But, I knew I could turn to you whenever I needed help.. When I had a problem with alcohol, you helped get it solved.. But, eventually, all of that just seemed to fall off.. I know you ain't over grandpa, but he's in a better place.. It hurts me too to look at pictures and see his face.. He built so much for you when he was alive,helped you survive Now that he's gone, I'm really sorry that he died.. He's happy up in the clouds doin' a life sentence.. And, he's blessin' us from heaven with his presence.. I hope he knows Quan, that kid was a positive influence.. His word was the only thing he had, and he always stuck to it. Even though we was pumpin' drugs, he kept me safe.. But, shit's changed since the day he was put in a grave.. Manic depression, razor cuts and overdosin' on pills.. Damn, man, I wish I could go back to the day he was killed.. We never would've went, but it was my decision.. I needed some money, I looked and he was missin'.. Never thought anybody cared, until the ambulance came.. Looked out the window, saw my brother callin' my name.. Saw deep in his eyes, and witnessed him startin' to cry.. I would just hate to see what happens the day I do die.. Didn't think anybody cared enough to cry over me.. Self-centered and greed-y, just beggin' for Jesus to cover me. --Chorus-- I got home sickness, and I don't know where to go.. All I see are poisonous clouds, acid rain and black snow.. Just for today,I'm beggin' to have something to come home to And, I never knew what I had, until the day that I found you.. Wishin' for someone to understand that I'm a man.. I need more than for somebody to hold my hand.. In need of guidance and supervision to what I'm witnessin'.. A broken home, and there's always hate under any condition.. --Verse 3--(Unfinished) My life shouldn't be the way that it is, all of us kids.. Under my parents supervision are constantly dissed.. Harassed, called names and beaten for stupid reason.. And, everybody wants to know why I wanna quit breathin'.. My parents call me a failure, but what do they know..? They're both fuck up's, and over time this will show.. Don't understand what we go through now a days.. It's a new century, we don't live by the olden ways.. Our future's aren't golden pathed, just trails with broken bricks At the end of the walk, we also get nailed to a crucifix.. My parents constantly tell me they don't care about me.. But,they don't know what this household would be without me I built alot for this family, my brother and sister come to me.. Whenever they have problems,yea,we got love unconditionally well i didnt get to finish becuase i gotta go to work tomorrow but there my piece good luck |
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08-25-04, 04:36 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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IP: 48EA 7C3F
Fuck it… Im sick of my home, no reason I gotta stay fa this “Crazy bitch” says my father; ragin, pissed, till he starts layin fists Hands attack, Me n’ momz coppin the raised back handed slaps At last ive had an idea, a way to escape from my bastard dad Bags were packed, I was ready, Hopped out the window n’ onto the lawn Lace my timbs tight, got on my bike, pushed up the block n’ im gone 1 year later Me n’ some homeies hooked up… cross us, we leave ya blazed n spent Fakin cheques, Hold ups n’ fraud… With no education, that’s how we pay the rent Live in a shotty apartment but its my home… place is ill, so no runnin’ My boys told me we was outta green though, … n that we needed some mo money Sunday night, aint no prob, one of them cats told me they found a place to rob So we gon take the job… If we get caught, fuck it… just run, don’t face the cops That night All stuffed in a truck, we got there… But you wouldn’t belive what my luck brought … pulled up… Got out the car… lifted my head up and saw my old front door I was like “hold up… cant we go somewhere different?? This place is cheap looking” Damn my bullshit cover… They replied “fuck nah … jus shut up n draw ya heat, pussy” I didn’t wanna look like a coward… I was too little of a man to speak I cant handle this… reminisce about old times, still loved my friends n family But its happening, was too late ta talk, they already kicked in the door My mama heard us come in… “whos there?”… “Shut up bitch, n get on the floor, We robbin ya house, we armed n dangerous, so don’t move, n be quiet Thinking bout callin the police? try it, n we’ll leave ya in the street, dyin….” She was in a corner with a gat to her head, had ta move quick n to sneak Didnt want her to know what id become… but still, she knew it was me… I realized maybe all the times I wanted to come back, it would’ve been better Cos me n mom always used to get by… even in the stormiest weather She stood by me when my my heart was turning black, n hurt But now she was crying... Because she knew I turned my back on her But now I was kinda feelin raw to the guys, they were beatin her, n ignorin her cries And the pain of their kicks couldn’t never amount to the pain I saw in her eyes When she looked at me as if to say “I can believe you’ve forsaken me” I became awake to see, that a thug is one thing that I hate to be All the other cats we do this to, prolly dead or they domes mopin.. Depressed as shit, cos guys like us ruined em, leavin they home broken So fuck this… I threw at G’s, as I socked my bro, the punch connected to the teeth And as my “homies” pulled the trigger on me.. I realized how much I miss the way it used to be |
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08-25-04, 05:03 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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IP: 48EA 7C3F
word... lol ima prolly lose the battle, so jus lettin ya know I reckon that was a nice drop... first time ive seen a topical from ya, n' it was dope... Cant say the same for ya battles though...lol nah j/p. But yeah, i was really feelin that shit. Dont mind losin if its to someone with skill. Props.
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08-25-04, 05:37 AM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP: 06B8 DBF2
Voted For: One-Man-Band
that was a long ass battle i swear. Aiight let me break it down. Angel, you had an alrite drop, there was some pretty good lines in that that i could relate to. However there were times where i couldnt follow where you were going with your verse and some lines i felt finished short. But dont get me wrong, it was a good drop. OMB.. i actually really felt your verse, there was a lot of emotion put into it. Family is something that everyone can relate to and the subject of turning on family is what really won this battle in my opinion. good drop from both, rhyming wise you both were about the same. But in the end, i think band took it with his story line. vote- One man band |
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08-25-04, 01:21 PM
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#8
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Best In The Game
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IP: 3240 794D
Voted For: - ArchAngel -
damn this was a great topical battle but ima have to give this one to Arch .. arch-you had mad feelin going into your piece.. you really had me wanting to read more and thats strange cuz i hate reading..lol...you really had some nice emotions..overall this was a beutiful piece from you one-man-band- you had an okay piece but your feelins werent hitten as hard as arch, you had sin flow the structure wasa alittle off..and so was the imagery but overall it was okay... |
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08-25-04, 01:24 PM
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#9
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Paris Hilton Gone Crip
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This was feedback posted for - ArchAngel -
IP: A5F0 318F
Its a tie both wasnt about home sick that much one was about a girl the other one ended robbin his mom not to good stick to battlin not topicals I see its a tie so both were ok elevate wit more concept and etc vote tie
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08-25-04, 02:00 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Voted For: - ArchAngel -
WOW, this was a great topical, both of you...... you both had nice personal touches and style on this topic, but i have to say arch, your verse was like song, i liked the chorus idea, and the way you set it up, you are a very vivid and descriptive writer, i enjoyed reading both verses though, and i appreciate both concepts, but arch's verse was written beautifully and the opening was very emotional for me, i can relate to this...............ima vote:arch
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08-26-04, 12:20 AM
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#11
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New to RB
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IP: BA46 A371
Voted For: - ArchAngel -
both where really hot but what i didnt like was how one man band went with it cause it just a bad concept, go and rob your own house... lol besides that flow was good eveything was good with both but because the way one man band went with it i vote archangel.
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08-26-04, 12:35 AM
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#12
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"Ill Emcee"
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IP: C4F6 D169
Voted For: - ArchAngel -
Archangel has this one... his flow was way better.... He had better lyrics... Awsome structure... my vote goes to arch.... Return tha fava!!... Vote on mah battles down there!!\/ \/ \/ |
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08-26-04, 12:42 AM
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IP: 3240 794D
Voted For: - ArchAngel -
ok claps to both ppl but one stuck to the topic more (home sickness doesn't mean ur sick of your home it means you MISS it) and Arch had betta structure and flow was nice also nice emotion to it too you take this vote/arch return the favor and vote on my battle with royal flush its on my sig and what font do you use arch?
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