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09-06-04, 01:34 AM
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how will it change??
IP: 5285 DC82
in a way ...we need to see a better day......
dont wanna live....regreting what that letter say.... i have no doubt that its a bill.. the goverment cant lets us just chill im gone fulfill..never loosing my will... i got to much pride to run and hide...... cause they on an endlis money collection.... lucky if i dont end up in faciltiy called correction... they tryna puts us on there direction.... i rent my house...so theres all ways an inspection... and did i mention .....they still unsure.. why they even went to war..... didnt understand the reason's to be preventing it for... i hate where i live.."mum why are we renting for?" i had no choice to sin.."why am i repenting for?"... how can i be sick a this shit.. when im living in the thick in this shit.. ive growen up seeing the wickedist shit.. its like we allready in hell...theres nothing below us.. still unsure if theres a heaven..when will god show us? fuck heaven ..i want to go to what evers above this... murder's rape,war,muggings,poverty,hate,scam's lie's. how the fuck can i love this? if they asked me to own the world ..i wouldnt take it.. i want to fix it even though i didnt make it.. better yet..take every1 off it..then break it... im loosing love for this place its cursed.. as if all the good...evil reversed it.. this shit was just keystyle..i never rehearsed it.. pz
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09-06-04, 02:10 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=145332
my link any comments please... leave a link and ill repay the favour pz
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09-06-04, 06:22 PM
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IP: 6804 D41F
Hey.That was pretty deep. Over all it was tight too but you used alot of the same words. Ex. Shit shit shit, for for and for, us and us. If you could work on that it would be hella-ill. I really liked the ending too. And the stuff about heel and heaven was dope.
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09-07-04, 01:01 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
thnx for the feed man..but i only used shit 3 times...the words written before "shit" was the rhyme..but adding shit just gives it a diffrent style in the song..and the same goes with the other words man..i wasnt using the same three words as my rhmes..lol.check the words before them ..they are the rhyme..
and did i mention .....they still "unsure".. why they even went to "war"..... didnt understand the reason's to be "preventing" it "for"... i hate where i live.."mum why are we "renting" for?" i had no choice to sin.."why am i "repenting" for" th for is a carry on from ..unsure..war..but before them i rhyme preventing.renting.repenting..so it gives it that better flow and i nacer sound....if this was audio ..when i spit it i would make each syllable clear..pre-vent-ing-for...ren-ting-for..re-pent-ing-for.. you see? it gives more of a flow.. anyway thnx for the feed man..any1 else with any thoughts on this? pz
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