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Old 09-27-04, 01:49 PM   #1
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why ??? need sum feedback

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sumtimez i cry , i dunno why
sumone tell me why all solja's gotta die
fuck the goverment what they say is just a lie
president of the usa , fuckin up the country erry day
take a moment of silence and let us pray
this goes out to all fallen youngsta's down irak
not enuff experience to fight in the frontline attack
all soljaz get ready to load your weapons
didn't have the money to take college lessons
parents gettin into deep depressions
their kids got taken away , never gone see dem again
livin in a world so dark lookin at nuthin but rain
grip your hands together , let us burn sum candles
if we stay together i am sure we can handle
they were affraid to die on the battlefield
our soljaz got used as a human shield
you could see fear in their eyes
they wont cry for one life ,they just wanted them to die
NOW SUMONE TELL ME WHY
IS THIS THE REASON WHY WE CRY
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Old 09-27-04, 05:56 PM   #2
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uppin ......
drop sum feedback in here
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Old 09-28-04, 02:03 PM   #3
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yo what wrong with y'all
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Old 09-29-04, 03:25 AM   #4
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deep . I liked this because it was obviously from your heart. Therefore you meant every word you wrote. Get a bit more tech with your rhyme's. But with the heart in this You will definitly stand out.
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Old 09-29-04, 05:21 PM   #5
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ty bruh
it came straight from tha heart
i lost sum1 from my fam in a war
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Old 09-29-04, 05:53 PM   #6
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yo much respect to u man that was deep it was from the heart
somebody in my life that was very important to me pass away
in the war to

we can over come these tough times
just keep ur head up man
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Old 09-30-04, 04:07 PM   #7
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upping ...........
ty bruh
yo need more feedback
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Old 09-30-04, 06:58 PM   #8
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best lines:
grip your hands together , let us burn sum candles
if we stay together i am sure we can handle
they were affraid to die on the battlefield
our soljaz got used as a human shield

^you always seem to drop very touchin' poems, very very nice, i liked this one a lot.. u put forth emotion and effort in ur poems, which is very good, ur poems seem so down to earth.. keep up ur good work..
pz
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Old 10-01-04, 08:14 PM   #9
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ty lady fiya
u drop sum ill shit 2
the game collab feat anxiety & L.I.
^^hot shit in there^^ upping ......
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Old 10-03-04, 09:29 PM   #10
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uppin ......
damn
when y'all gone wake up
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Old 10-07-04, 06:22 PM   #11
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yo upping for this stuff
comon y'all need sum feedback
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Old 10-10-04, 08:08 PM   #12
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yo upping
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tell me what ya think
& Xplane y you liked it
if u do like it
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