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Old 10-04-04, 05:46 PM   #1
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Drowning in Thought

I always thought I had it rough, that good times were just a bluff
Never quite filled with happiness, who knew life would be so tough
Enough! Story of my life is missing pages, sometimes I just don’t make it
Invisible cages, and violent rages, summed up my life in stages
Different phases, but I’m lucky when you look at the big picture
People dying around the world, while I’m writing in Sacred Scriptures
Opinions differ, I should be grateful for our troops fighting overseas
Military personnel, achieving victories ensuring freedom for centuries
Even smaller things in life, that mostly tend to pass unnoticed
The helpless and the homeless, cause me to lose my focus
People living on the street, begging for bread, using benches for beds
When I’m close-minded wishing I was dead, but I got a roof over my head
My dreaded altercations, usually amount to nothing in the long run
Imbedded complications refuse to be seen coming without welcome
But eventually they evaporate, incinerate as time ticks on and on
Negotiate with right and wrong, I drop verses terrorists drop bombs
Now I can’t help but to ponder, the world’s undeniable struggles
Left with the rash realization, about the serious problems of others
My head is racing with ideas, thinking of how can I compare
All of my simplistic shit, with the devastating troubles of theirs
Wars, poverty, loss of lives, corrupt governments and their lies
I try to fathom being their shoes, I probably wouldn’t survive
So many negative thoughts in my mind, yet I feel so alone
Overwhelming, someone help me, depressed from issues I can’t control
I feel so much sympathy for those, who have it so much worse than me
Puts everything in perspective, helped me find me true identity
Rivers on my cheeks, waterfalls off my chin, I thank God I’m me
Even my thoughts are crying steadily, Drowning me in harsh reality
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Old 10-04-04, 06:55 PM   #2
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wow, deep poem, i felt this foreal, nice imagery in your words as well, keep drooppin dope pieces...........1
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Old 10-05-04, 03:12 AM   #3
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Thanks a lot...jus came over from RB...hope to be active on RV from now on
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Old 10-05-04, 03:55 AM   #4
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lmfao nice shit dawg...but quit fuckin wit me on aim....i'm confooooosed an its to early
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Old 10-05-04, 11:54 PM   #5
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thanks for the replys i guess...not really any good feedback..how are people sposed ti improve when you dodn't critique their verses
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Old 10-06-04, 08:51 AM   #6
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Very nice drop. This is probably my favorout poetry peice on this site in a while. I think theres a lot to learn from peoples struggles and you outlined it nicely with well written rhymes and flow.

Good job and I look forward to reading more of your peices.
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Old 10-06-04, 11:39 PM   #7
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you are takin up ur old form as you did on rb,by froppin great pieces,very emotional,the imagery is there all the way,i like how ya dropped it down into details...and the setting of the poem was also nice very good jamison i mean lyric lol....peace
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