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Self Assist (1st Poem-18 scrpiture)
IP: 0825 899A
Ha 1st Poetry here 1th Scrpiure(open mic et.) "Self Assist" iight here I go... while lending a helpless helpful man a dime take time to rewind and check if you are inclned to what feelings this man is dealing with on the inside he smiles grateful and says thank you..... but ten cents won't ride...but to help your concious... then fine...now the man has 10 cents to heal his dents... and black prints from checkin for change searchin threw vents... maybe then you'll get the hint...that this man depends... on you for help...its you with wealth.... if you threw a scope you will see you're only helping yourself... though in church...they recomend 7 but you give twenty but to one who needs it you barely give him pennies.... why give plenty...to a church that only clams to be friendly... dont you see its plot?...why must you pay for god... the religion is no longer broad...what makes them different... do you suspect there a threat with drugs or the recent.. excape fome prison....next time you have these thoughts take a glance at your jesud pendant....problems ae delt with even if I wrote this..in one way..we all are selfsish if you crit this thank you very much ![]() I do so much on RV in terms of open mics and Volunteer rap, but I NEVER recieve any crits for it ![]() i'm mearly doing this for the love of rap and the whole HipHop culture at 14 my love for this is growing everytime I do or see or hear anything related peace niggas its been real !!! ~1~
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IP: 3240 794D
wow,i liked this a lot, you raised some interesting questions here, about religion and its loopholes, nice job on this and it flowed very well....keep on doin it...1
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IP: 28AD 5545
thanx mayn
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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IP: 5043 32F4
yo man this is some hot shit. you should try writen a song about love you got that expression thing you kno? its just i feel yer hart in yer shti it makes me feel happy haha that was gay but ya man 8.4/10 keep posten
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