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Old 10-02-04, 01:28 AM   #1
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Exclamation Looking 4 A Battle (Callot 2 n e 1)

IP: 0825 899A

Ay Yall Out there I Need Somethin On My Record So This IS A Callout So Respond If You Wanna BAttle me....

A YAll 8 mile rapperz go Suck on A Slug
Ya Was Talkin Shit Till Ya Head Ended Unda The Rug
Yall Hate It B~cuz all You C is I~G~U
And My Shine Come From these Lines So they I~C~Blue
Yall bitchez B Searchin For Ya Nutz Sayin I~C~U
Stop Ya Bitchin B~cuz U Aint No G
U Jus Some Nigga Who Went To The Pin N CAught The H~I~V
And Fallin into L~O~V~E Wit SOme Pussy you Met 5yrs AgoAint That How You Ended Up N The Pin Tryin To Go Blow~4~Blow
Why Yall Actin So Scared U aint Neva Heard It Like This
Yall Niggaz B Unfresh Like N~Y~C Whore Piss
Yall Make Me Sick, With Ya Damn Dick Climmaz
Open Ya Gurl up N Clamp Her Like a 3 ring Binder
Yall Start Runnin When You Here The Sounder
Of My Gunz Go Off Witout one Lock up Or cough
The Led keeps Goin While My Rymes Stay Flowin
And You Gon Stay knowin ~ Why Ya Gurl keepz Blowin
And I Aint Talkin Bout Breathin
Sneek N Ya House N Fuck her While You Sleepin
You Thought You Was Waxin That pussy When She Was Really CreepnI Got Skillz U Got Chillz And Im What Ya Seekin
If Ya Feelin Good Then Im Bad 4 ya Health
Im The Real Champ So Im Takin the Belt And Stealin The WealthFuck It if You Scared But If You Step Up Make Sure You Say A PrayerCuz Im The Real Killa The King Betta Than Mayor
My Skills So Good Have You Callin Me "Dipset The Microphone Slayer"

I Yall Thats Not All That Good But Its Jus A Callout I Need To Get Somethin On My Record So Atleast 5 of Yall Hit me Up But Im only Battlin one at a Time N We Will Schedule When We Battle You Can Set up the rulez
I Dont Care

Oh Yeah I Need Some Help Gettin my ol Site BAc Active So If You Wanna join It Or jus Check it out N Help it Get Crunk Again Then Plz help heres The Link http://-----------------/directory.php?go=292453

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Old 10-02-04, 04:16 AM   #2
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This is decent . you have some allright rhyme's in it. Your structure is not to bad.Try not to stretch your line's out to much.
.try keeping your line's around the same syllable count. this will help your structure and flow....keep dropping....pz
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Old 10-02-04, 10:46 AM   #3
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Thanx Mayne Thats The 1st Time Someone Aint Said Some Dumb Shit like Oh u Wack or Is That All But thanx And Surely I will Use That Advice You Gave me B~cuz I Was Rappin It Out Loud And I Lost The Rythm A Few Times So Ill Use That Advice And Again Thanx
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