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Old 10-16-04, 04:01 PM   #1
Dabatos
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Paradise Gone

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This is my verse against L.I.,

Vote in the battle if you could...

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=155441


[My Paradise]
It wasn't another ritual, misrable day...
Writting my original, lyrical verse in my spiritual place..
This land had trees from the tallest to shortest..
Empty of tourist, Im alone in my own paradise forest...
It's nice n private, it's quiet, more silent then slienced...
A unknown creator behind it, Gods Heaven Defines it...
This creation is what gives me my great inspirations...
Empty of hate temptations, soul warmed by the insilation..
Had no preperations to have my eyes full of amazment...
There is no replacement for the paradise im placed in...

[Why I Will Never Leave]
This is where I made my family, who show'd love back at me...
When I would sadely go through tough struggles tragiclly...
This is where i met my fiancee, my love, my true destiny...
The person thats ment for me who'll always love me endlessly...
This is my home, full of good and bad memories...
And i'll never ever leave untill i reach the end of me...


[A dream]
It wasn't a regular nite, because of this terrible dream...
Full of unforgetable, dreadfull things i wish i never seen..
What I dreamed felt like a vision, like a short preminition...
Cuz I saw myself leavin paradise and wasn't my decision...
Reasons Missin, woke up wit body temp. over 100 degrees...
As if i jst survived a volcanic debree thats jst been released....

[Ashes]
I open my eyes wider, realized im in the middle of a wild fire...
Can't think, my eyes tired, see a tree so decide to climb higher..
I jump down the other side, right before the tree quickly clashes..
I ain't the only one scared,cuz as i run, an animal quickly passes..
Why did this have to happen, I really don't understand it...
As I still panic, more trees to the ground loudly smashes...
As i stand from far, memories in paradise slowly turns to ashes..
As I stand from far, I say to my self, "It was nice while it lasted"...


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