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Old 10-18-04, 07:20 AM   #1
Chew187
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ample but deadly

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let me introduce you to the master of cellabration
induce you with the spirit of gods best creation
bruised and abused trying to steal salvation
i'll entice thee with rhymes that R spicy like cajun
the time they elevate you'll see the equation
they will leave you confused laid out with abrasion
on your body through-out you better find a new route
to school cus the bus ain't dependant, time to grow out
of your adolecant years or take your life and end it
look at all the years you've wasted pretending
to be something your not now your brain cells are shot
ready or not here i cum like hot butter
to spread & infect your sister and her mother
like or not one way or another
I will be on top ; when i get there i wont stop
this showcase was just a sample so get ready G
i'll show you how my flow is ample but deadly
steadily I can put you to shame to prove once again that i'm on top of my game
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Old 10-18-04, 06:42 PM   #2
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this wasnt that creative but if ur talking about audio its model verse......some lines are still a lil too long though for audio but.........judgin by text its got no wordplay...and no multies....a lil creativity and no metaz.......for an audio piece its good though...

juss keep writin...1

ps..can u drop some feed on "legend is born" its the sickest text piece ever
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Old 10-18-04, 06:50 PM   #3
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This was ok, needs a lil more vocab and wordplay and like he said meta's and other aspects to define your peice.

But in audio this would sound good....

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