Here is some shit of the top of my head... Not really a freestyle, but you know...


Yo... Got grounded for my grades, an F in an elective...
Fuck Spanish 201, i hate to be so directive...
But that fucking bitch is so dumb, we need a new teacher...
She cant even remember the fucking language, sometimes we teach her...
I guess when i smoke, i get shit of my chest...
But im really fucking pissed, this aint in jest...
How am i suppossed to get wasted, you fucking bastards!!!
What parent of a 15 year old doesnt let their son get plastered?
Maybe im rambling, but this is some serious shit...
What kind of weed am i smoking... Each hit is a mysterious hit...
I just got my computer, now ill be dropping more shit...
If you dont like my stuff now, shut up and cork it...
Half eigth for 30? No looch its 25...
But its good shit, an intense but funny high...

not bad for a quicky but you got some shit to work on. and watch the language haha jk do you audio battle or just text. I dunno you should check out my stuff it's about as good as yours

Flow was pretty good at first, then it went kinda weird.
You need to work on vocab and consistency of the lines.
You used a couple words that were repetitive.
Not bad, keep it up.

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rap4 ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rp)
n. Slang: A form of popular <a href="http://www.ntsearch.com/search.php?q=music&v=56">music</a> developed especially in African-American urban communities and characterized by spoken or chanted rhyming lyrics with a syncopated, repetitive rhythmic accompaniment.
^Don't forget the white man^
Poetic Scriptures poems:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157364
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157462

Ahahaha... You failed Spanish? Straight up thug, yo.