through trial and exile,here's my shoe's go walk a mile, then tell me what you see before you consider judging me, have you ever had to ride or close your homies eye's, or felt a bullet burning up your flesh from inside, then payed your respect's,and still waited on deck, half out of comission but still down to dump a tech, rebound ready with emotions hangin heavy, so many homies they can't fit inside the Chevy, leather gloves and printless slug's, A glimps into the life of an everyday thug...... (HOOKx2) Hold on, keep your head up as life goes on Closed caskets,state clothes,were do we really belong Products of our environment,please listen to the song and maybe you can me were my life went wrong... Don't get caught slippin,always trust your gut feelin, this song should be named after the show "How I'm Livin", bullet riddled doors,and casualty's of war's, gettin lit up while walkin out the liquor store, only the strong survive, it's survival of the fittest, and ain't no turning back cause once your in it,your in it, that's just the price you pay on a day to day, and that bulletproof vest won't stop a fuckin A-K, so say your foxhole prayers,then kiss your ass goodby you know the modo just say it,(This is Life,Do or Die)......(back to Hookx2) Homies locked up,for doin some dirt, homies locked up cause they couldn't find work, acceptin calls and sendin pictures for their wall, pourin out liquor for the soliers that fall, sheddin tears in the dark,no more kickin it at the park, Only baby mamma drama and relationships without a spark, If their not dead or cons, homies moved up and on, And if your livin what Im spittin you understand the song...(finish with Hookx2).....X-Felon

uh..........your supposed to post your written verse(s) in the open mic forum. hopefully...that info helps you out. one.

s.v.

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Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

decent piece, nice drop. its a little rough, but i felt where you were coming from. your new anyway...so it doesnt matter.

advice...
work on your structure
proofread everything
separate verse(s) from hooks
work on the flow (your verse(s) rhythm)

what i liked...
your emotion
your vocab
you painted a pretty good picture...cool

keep working on your craft and continue elevating. you can only get better.

s.v....a.k.a...father crhyme.......c.s.

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

dat shyt pretty hot son stay up 1