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Old 10-22-04, 05:05 PM   #1
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Illest Shit, FEEDBACK!!!!

IP: BAAD 84F0

To da KIDS

yo ppl wana assume what i am or what i do?, who da fuck gave yalll dat rite? yo yall think u no me? Let see...


Yo who would of thought id still b here rippin, seein fake thugs dippen,
teahcers trippen, n seein my left n rite bird continously flippin,
pointin da flying birds, at the bitches of the burbs,
Words couldnt describe my nervese, confusin wit twists and turns,
If ur in the path of the destruction, ull b unda construction,
for fukin wit me on da wrong day, leme say wat i got to say,
people wana play, and i keep hearin my mutha fukin name,
u take me for a wana b fella, last person to say that is locked in my cella,
i wanred her friend to fuckin tell ha, Dont fuck wit me bitch! what did i tell ya!?
Fuckin stinky ass plastic barbie bitch ass slut!, i fukin told u to shut the fuck up!,
Stop screamin!! Stop fuckin screamin!!! Stop, yo suck my cock,
the door is locked, you will get knocked,
If you continue to flop around tryin to grab the knob,
break yo nose run to yo gurls n fuckin sob,
O now ur cryin, i told u i wasnt lien,
thought u was buyin time by callin me baby brian,
How does it feel to know ur fuckin dien?,
I slipped the pill in yo mouth u swallowed,
ur skull and brain was hollowed,
you open your mouth your tryin yo shout
but nothin come out, threw u out the house,
ur not my spouse, theres no relationship to announce,
and sry i dint pronounce the verbs, ad verbs, or pro-nouns,
Time to go now so u can show how,
i broke ur knees and made u slow down,
U cant run girl u have no knees, u can beg for mercry u wont get nun from me,
beg for me not to hurt u, i wont work u ill smack, pull n jerk u,
and then call up Homes to come serve you,
i wont touch u my gun and knifes will murda you,
ill make it so no one has fukin hurda you,
files erased, all your pictures replaced,
what the fuck no one remembers your fuckin face,
your in a safe place, ill see you soon when kill my wife n kids all in 2 days,
so untill then the hate stays, so ill see u n helll n hang u wit chains,
2 by fours, 3 inch boards, pray to lords, imma cut u wit swords, and whip u wit cable cords,
i swore to lord id pour the blood from our war, all over a department store,
nest to the ladies clothes, so the blood flows,
ull need a row boat to find the fur coats,
n they'll suck it up n upsorb the coke from the bloodstream,
n me imaginin hearin a terror scream could it b?,
a wite dude jus killed entire cheerliadin team?,
it is , n next is the kids, they need a fix, i take the pics,
the gurls give the licks, smack da bitch not givin 2 squirts of piss,
i hope u mutha fuckas get evry word of this,
n fuck a tramp, fuck a slut, fuck a hoe, fuck a bitch,

yo im out!
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Old 10-23-04, 12:56 AM   #2
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leme get some feedback on this!
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Old 10-23-04, 09:20 PM   #3
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i got fuckin 11 views but no posts??? lets go RV QUIT SLEEPIN!!!!!!!
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Old 10-24-04, 01:33 PM   #4
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long ass shit but it was alrite, you need alot of work tho like your content(get rid of that gangsta flow) your structure, your multis, you need to check out the forum for help on shit like this, but this had a flow to it depends on reading speed lol. rating it a 3/5 keep dropping and try n elevate peace out
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