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The Epitome Of Greatness
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Conscious Thoughts... Deep
IP: 28AD 5545
Check It....
A Crash, A Splash Of Colors That Bound The Sea Unwound And Free, Still Uniquely Profound To Me I Drown And Scream, Because My Existance Is Lost Persistance Is Tossed, It's Like I Distanced The Cross My Vision Is False, Just Like Glasses With No Lens Then Again, Who Am I To Judge The Absence Of Men And So I Spend, An Entire Lifetime Seeking For Eternity Maturity Is Staying Strong When The Flames Of Hell Are Burning Me Hook: Now Finally I Have Succeeded, And Found The Median Chance's Repeated, I Found The Meaning In Obedience Succeeding Is Accomplishing, Though Not Immediate I've Risen To Advanced And Surpassed The Intermediate ... I Got A Chance To Revoke It, At Last Im Open Im Trashed And Floating, Right Back To Square One My Pen Is A Flare Gun, See My Message In The Bare Sun Before I Know It, Im Back In This Everlasting Dungeon No Escape From The Pungent Smell Of Agony Amongst It The Solution Is Balance Between Optimal And Minimal Conscious And Subliminal.... Tragic And Comical Crucial And Marginal.... The List Is Eternal Let Your Mind Be A Pen And Expand Your Journal ... Now Finally I Have Succeeded, And Found The Median Chance's Repeated, I Found The Meaning In Obedience Succeeding Is Accomplishing, Though Not Immediate I've Risen To Advanced And Surpassed The Intermediate ~!1!~ Feedback Please
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Middle Weight
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IP: 005F B7E2
You have a flop-fat dome and brains not at home to answer
The door, cancer galore in your rhymes like a sickle cell dancer Rhymes don’t blend tight you invite scum to write some choppy Verse you a sloppy burst of failure with paraphernalia drive jalopy With flow dim, no rims and four flat tires, had enough of the bluff Present a bold front, sprint as an ole punk with no speed you not tuff YAYO your rhymes like play doe have no shape or size can’t make A wise verse and lies worse than fairy tales, you Cindarella fake This tender fella break rules like cops on busts, like Mandella I’m great I’m strong like upright construction but you a corrupt sight for production I rhyme sickness it a combine quickness of flight and brain suction Scrap with all groups like a wall of troops but you a tall fruit loop No flavor in your bowl |
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 28AD 5545
what the hell is you doin stay outta my threads hoecake
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New to RB
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IP: 967B 2E06
lol @ madrapper.... anyways..
this was nice and deep, flow was good, vocab was good... the hook was aight.. overall, i enjoyed readin this...good drop! peace |
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 0825 899A
good look on feedback uppin for more
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-Classified-
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IP: 4A13 FA36
this was nice flow.....multi's everywhere n it was flowin real gud, gud emotion n nice vocab used throughout, hook was above average was yeh i liked this piece, it made me wanna read on which is always gud....lol
nice drop i'd give it... 8.5/10 peace flow can ya hit the open mic in my sig wiv feedback, wud appreciate it from an established topical writer... thanx
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: C135 36D5
wow man, this was very good, I really like the multis
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 0825 899A
This was dope all around,,nice flow and vocabulary, i love the hook, it was fire.. and the way you set it up, excellent words and deep meaning, love the "let your mind be a pen and expand your journal" line, nice job..1
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 0825 899A
thankx for all the feedback and your right i.mind its hard to imagine lol your not slow
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Back In Business
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IP: 9DD1 2DB9
*definitely thinking I.G. reps the right crew!*
yo... that shyt was hot! that hook was some album type shyt... real deep with lots of meaning... only thing that could make this better is another verse... rep to da DEF homie! |
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