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~Living~Confused~
IP: 3240 794D
~Living~Confused~ eyes laced wit blood, from tried racy drugs despise hated thugs, for sellin dried hybrid nugs but shy wit emotion, for strained tempered anger why put in motion, plans to uproot certain strangers indanger freinds and family, for yurning for the devils candy they selfishly cant stand me, much like a dried beach thats sandy I look in my past to mention, not to make such a rash decision to clash wit persission, is only to amask the opossition to mess with gods vision, is to touch certain death and my persprent breath, will shiver under churnin derrest the streets are like a book, flooded with many characters from theives to rottin crooks, they find a way to fare and stirr and its sad to see, to live in such mental agony the anger? are they mad at me, runnin my soul till its raggedy and my stomach begins the turrnin, Oh how I feal the burrden of having an opinionated psyche, Oh my soul is burnnin churnnin deep inside, and yet the evil continues to arise oh happily I would ablige, if I could only retreat the lies shall my life begin to tighten, should the evil become the frightened if only the truth should rippen, will you meet the good and inlightened ~heven always awaits the living~ |
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any feed back? huh?
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this was ok seemed like u forced some things...
.but was ok..you could use some work on your vocab decent drop..but could have been alittle better man no hate just my opinion, and tryin to lay the facts.. but keep up the work and u will be right on key soon enuff. thing that stood out most for you was this; "I look in my past to mention, not to make such a rash decision to clash wit persission, is only to amask the opossition" allright job man..once again no hate just feedback...Pz. |
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good look.......................uppin^
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That was pretty deadly dude I liked it alot. that was really thought out nicely
keep em a bit simpler and make some songs you'll do just fine!! ![]() |
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