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Old 10-05-04, 05:12 PM   #1
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Bank Robbery

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BANK ROBBERY


yo im steppin inside tha bank ready to rob that bitch
me and my niggas got straped ran up in there and started bustin clips

now all these fuckas in here on tha ground all shiverin
some niggas in tha back started bickerin

so we let uhm feel a bullet
security had guns by they wasnt gone pull it

started packin bags with stacks of hundreds dolla bills
some bitch got up so i shot hur ya boy got skills

im aimin at tha manager with a bullet in tha chamber
my gun got anger so he ducked cuzz he knew it was danger

now cops started comin to tha scene
so much cops i could of swear it was a dream

ran down an alley in broad day
cops blocked me off so i hat to let tha tech spray

ran out tha alley more cops started comin
so me and my nigga ORLANDA started runnin

cops shootin we aproachin a dead end
i think this is it me and my nigga was sayin this is tha end

no bullets or clips left just a knife
i didnt pull it cuzz i knew it would be my life

suddenly every thing got quiet it was all blank
here come my niggas that helped me rob tha bank

bullets started flyin
my hommie got shot and was now dien

aproached tha block with a diffrent look
from head down to my foot

tha duffle bags gettin heavy wheres our ride
up pulls a chevy so we jumped inside

pulled off with that gangsta look in our eye
untill i relized it wasnt worth nothin
seing ya hommie die

dont turn ya back on a gun it will hurt ya
dont turn ya back on ya bitch shell wurk ya
and dont turn ya back on me cuzz i will murk ya
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Old 10-05-04, 05:16 PM   #2
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uppin for feed back yall get at this thing..............
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Old 10-05-04, 05:20 PM   #3
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o aight good flow,,,,,,,it seem at some parts u didnt stayed on point but good verse here mayne good flow,,,,,,nice paintin an picture

i give dis piece an 6/10 basically u didnt stayed on point but its cool mayne keep doin ya thing aight

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Old 10-05-04, 05:22 PM   #4
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yea i know mayn i tryed to do that but i couldnt find any words that would make it lol but good lookin tho
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Old 10-05-04, 05:25 PM   #5
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yo iam going to help u out homie go to poetry.com and u'll see an shit says need help rhyming just put an word an click search for rhymes mayne it always helps me in an battle lol check it mayne ~!
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Old 10-05-04, 05:29 PM   #6
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aiight cuzzin imma look it up good lookin hommie
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Old 10-05-04, 07:11 PM   #7
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Aye Yo I Need Some Feedback On This Holla Atcha Boy
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Old 10-06-04, 06:05 PM   #8
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Old 10-07-04, 07:13 PM   #9
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Old 11-01-04, 03:42 PM   #10
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Old 11-01-04, 09:22 PM   #11
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Not bad, had good rhythem to it; I would compare your style to 2pac's so keep em coming you can write a better one than that 7.5/10
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