This is my life through torn eyes


My whole life I'd been blessed to know a man I called Grandpa
The whole time I thought, He was Invisible, and never could be touched
He got cancer, and they said There's no answer
Through Chemo, and radiation, It hurt too see him suffer

(Realisizm)

November 13th at 7:55, My rolemodel My hero Had died
Clenched mY fist Sworn to god asking why
My wHole ego was built Around him, He was 1 of a kind..
My life My world, Has paused for the first time

I woke up at like 7:54, Hit the stairs, My grandma said he wasnt here anymore
Heard his last breath's, Seap From his chest's
If I'da had a gun, I'da followed him next
My grandpa, My friend, My emergency Talk, Has went 2-soar

God please take care of the guy who Influenced my life, Through
Talk's chat's, Stories of happy and ending's and fact's
No fiction to thing's, Sworn to in vein
God I wish, I'da had my grandpa one last day

I know I was being selfish, I was gonna die to, Commit suicide through
Gun's Pill's, or something in such
My life my world has never Crumbled thsi much'
All because of this life, I had, and that My grandfather touched

When jesus died on the cross, My sin's were forgotten all was lost
My pain's my sufferin all was washed, My ego my pride My grandpa-was-gone
Earlier that day, I talked 2 him and he talked back
Reality never struck me, I said I loved You papa, And he said it back

Took some medicine, That put him in a coma like stage
Witnessing that image, Will never Fade, Its burned in my brains
My soul My heart, My whole life has been shed into part's
If for one second My life woulda ended, I wouldnt care, I'd see him a newstart

For a moment I woulda sacrificed my life, On a cross with thorns
A new ego, an new outlook, and new spirit was formed
My head, My back, My whole soul quivered in fear
A weird feeling brushed by my neck, Giving me a feeling 2 be sincere

(Closing Note)
Jesus Had saved another life from a grave, But took my bestfriend
I would killed myself, If I hadnt promised him the end.
I miss him, He was like a brother and a hero
U couldnt get that shyt in hollywood, With Paris hilton, Or Deniro'

-wreck-

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Aiiiiiight Work On Tha Struture......vocab........but Either Way U Expressed It Thats All It Matters Although Some Of The Flow Was Chopped Up. U'd Still Expressed It.......chea

It Dont Have To Rhyme It Just Gots To Make Sense Nuff Said

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THE SLEEP & THE DREAM-

SEE THAT EMPIRE WERD~!

P.S.A

COMING SOON-GODS BETRAYL
OUT NOW-THE SLEEP & THE DREAM

flow was a lil' off at points, but u had a nice focus... this is a deep story, but very nice.. and not too mushy, audiences will really enjoy it, cuz it seemed it came str8 from your heart as more than a writing attempt but an emotional piece.. good job, keep droppin ya works..

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tHANK'S Fiya, Seems pretty slick heain that come from ya.

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yea that was a nice drop fam a little off on tha flow at sum areas but.....u did get your point across so i liked it......keep it up fam.....