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Old 07-08-02, 03:20 AM   #1
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24 hours to live

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if asked " if i had 24 hours to live what would i do right now?"/
i'd jump head first from my window cuz i'm only 2 flights down/
it would be all over in a matter of seconds without even blinking/
i'd have my brains splattered all over the sidewalk so ppl could see what i was thinking/
fuck suicide i'd live life to the very last second/
i aint a coward i just wanna try every last weapon/
take techs to ppls necks and kitchen knifes to ppls chests/ pipebombs in mailboxes and fanblades to pplz flesh/
i'll put a chainsaw to ya jaw , you'll be in so much pain that you'll knaw your own arm off/
its gettin close and i can barely deal with this drama/
i'm about to impregnant a bitch and say farewell to my mama/
cuz lucifers waitin with a seat next to him and osama/
i wont be on earth to witness the birth of my spawn/
cuz at dawn thats when my spirit is gone/
when asked why none of this is hurtin me/
i reply cuz my soul is destined to burn for eternity
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Old 07-08-02, 03:24 AM   #2
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This is a decent drop.

Good concept. This was all I was really feeling though:

it would be all over in a matter of seconds without even blinking/
i'd have my brains splattered all over the sidewalk so ppl could see what i was thinking/

Nice lines, but they'd be better if you reworded 'em.
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Old 07-08-02, 03:29 AM   #3
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it flows in my head cuz i'm thinking of a certain beat , good looks
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Old 07-08-02, 08:31 AM   #4
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this was a funny drop i liked it. need to extend it a bit cos it was a bit short and maybe use a bit more topic related vocab for imagery but still nice drop check mine i got a few to choose from
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Old 07-08-02, 11:41 AM   #5
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iight good looks
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Old 07-08-02, 01:04 PM   #6
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my 24th hour/i was sour/i hate/my unvoluntary fate/made my usual prayer/father keep my soul safe/placed my seeds/in front/explained the situation/we the last of a dyin breed/and it wont be any replacements/the thought had my heart, barely beating/now im pacing n weezin/no asthma/but death at the door/had me gaspin for air/no laughter/sweat/ sucrettin from pores/finally judgement day, long awaited/24 hours away/was like 1 shot n all your internal organs/get pierced/or penetrated/the fealin was unrelated/forgave all that hate/includin the advasaries/and ill fated/man/its gotta be a betta plan/than/this/9 shy of a brightful 30/friends still remained friends/but advasaries became my number 1/dirties(partna; STL slang)all i eva wanted/was for the Lord to forgive me/and have mercy on my soul/but on earth id got accustom to/the streets/totin heat/n pitchin that dro/so for the last 24/i repent each n every sin/for family,kin n friends/committed/my route is mine/if you can fit the shoe/then get it/the question i ask you/is/do you get it???...1
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Old 07-08-02, 07:04 PM   #7
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iight
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Old 07-08-02, 08:35 PM   #8
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I thought this was nice, some decent lines and some constructive lines... I seen this concept done about a million times, I thought you used the rhyme scheme well and it come clear, some good rhythm involved and you showed through your multies... The wordplay was aight, sometimes a bit drastic, more metaphors woulda been iLL and given the spit something else... The vocab was down to point, and it was well used sometimes, othertimes none was used... It was solid throughout, keep spitting and elevating... This would prolly sound good in audio...

Peez...
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Old 07-09-02, 03:12 AM   #9
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iight good looks
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Old 07-09-02, 12:06 PM   #10
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my fault for freepostin yesterday, i thought i was replyin to a cypher, but keep doin yo thing,word up...1
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Old 07-09-02, 02:03 PM   #11
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itz iight dog , nice spit
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