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Old 01-18-05, 07:40 PM   #1
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Arrow bad influence (READ THIS)

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may have bad aim tryin hard to emence this rap game
one step at a time / this aint a place to protect a rep
this where we can settle down an unwind.........
gotta be creative wit every line......

shit half this crap aint even rap.....
now i just sit back an laught at it
kids talkin bout shot guns an semie automatics
shit a new list of jacked up mad rabbits......but they dont speak tha truth
addicted to faggit ass habbits.....wat do ya want proof?

rhymein big words dont mean shit /unless you actually know tha deffinition
of it.. i.realy dont give a fuck where ya place me / im a be waitin here paitienly...........for ya ta face me /admit it ya like what i say /a little to fast
paced/ fuck yous all kiss my ass third line you can erase......

thinkin your tought with tha words ya write //
step up got enought stuff here ta woop your ass off tha site...?


SHIT I WAS JUST HAVEN FUN WITH THIS
YO IF YA GOT A SENCE OF TASTE
YOULD KNOW THIS PIECE IS GOOD ENOUGHT TA MIX WITH FAITH CB83
I BRING LYRICS TO THA GRAVE............
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Old 01-19-05, 11:51 AM   #2
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not bad! I first thought eminem wrote it, because you said bad influence in the title
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Old 01-19-05, 12:32 PM   #3
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yea me to but it was not that bad but I think you can work on strucutre a lil it aint aht bad but work on it to imprve a lil but hey check out my mic peace. 7.4/10
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Old 01-19-05, 04:23 PM   #4
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#1 your not rhymin so its not workin rite #2 get rid of those bars at the end not cool man # wasnt really feelin dis piece vocab was to simply yo flow wasnt on point all the time had a lot of streched lines elevate
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