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Old 12-09-04, 06:39 AM   #1
Logic The Goonie
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Peep this...

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This is some ollllld ass shit I wrote for a girl.Don't question anything, just peep, and leave feedback. It was supposed to go to the beat for "Through The Wire"...
1st Verse
I been here since begginings what you wanna know about?
Been here since you took my heart and before you ripped it out
Seen these niggas come and go, seen both our hearts be broken
Seen you love 5 plus dudes and I thought you was jokin
I seen a couple kids come through take ya heart like i never could
Seen you say you hate the place just cuz you thought it was hood
Seen numerous tears run down ya face till i saw someone stop em
Seen you feel bad bout what i say and choke up when i dropped it
Seen the words spew out ya mouth just cuz you thought they hurt
Seen you kill yaself over Christian like you aint seen nothin worse
Seen the hookups come in quickly and seen em go just as fast
Seen the times where I was rejected both times that I asked
Seen you make the dumb mistakes and watched me pick you up
Seen you ignore the cautious words when i said you slippin up
Seen you read some shit and cry knowin i was standin there
Seen you look at what i showed and only acted like you cared
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2nd verse
But what the focus of the song is to show you that i give a shit
That everything you stressin on that I already lived through it
One or two times and multiple occasions just as often
And the love that i showed you, shit ill take it to my coffin
What makes the difference now? its been just a couple months
How can the love just dissapeer when it was here more than once?
It cant and thats the answer to most of the quesions i pose
And whats gunna happen next neither of us really knows
Its all up to fate now we make very little decisions
But we can choose what type of love we wanna live in
Are you gunna go back to jokers with nearly nothin to give you?
Or do you wanna heed my words, if not, what else can a kid do?
I done said i loved you so its obvious that shit wont work
And i dont even think i like you, shit just makes me go bezerk
I even know that after Ronalds gone you gunna go for Kurt
And i know ill try to stay out but come out lookin like a jerk
So fuck it i’ll drop the mic walk away and go dreamin
But remember what the kid thinks next time that you see him
Of how i made the staements and proclaimed em loud and clearly
And watch you come out the shit actin like you caint hear me
Im only statin facts some opinions and gut instinct is down
To the point where most my niggas hear this and gimme a pound
The last lines gunna sum it up and you know to never doubt it
I love you Ashley ********* nothin you can do about it

I was soooo sensitive. lol

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Old 12-09-04, 01:19 PM   #2
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way too long but its alright..up your vocab a little
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Old 12-09-04, 07:55 PM   #3
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LMFAO, ok kid

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Old 12-09-04, 08:04 PM   #4
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honestly this was decent....

emotionw as high, u was very discriptive...
flow was decent..
* i aint really like the 1st verse THAT MUCH due to how u started off every line with
SEEN U blah blah SEEN U blah blah SEEN u with blah blah that kinda made me not wanna read it then again the creativeness that went along with each line was preety good thats what keep me reading....
2ed verse a little better .......

all around decent drop... 7.5 outta 10
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