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12-21-04, 10:49 PM
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Parallel vs anxiety
IP: 6CB8 12EC
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2 hours... Check in Immidiatly... No Crew Votes... :Topic: Every Damn Day... Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 12-21-04 at 11:19 PM Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in. |
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12-21-04, 10:50 PM
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IP: 5043 32F4
Parallel has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-21-04 10:50 PM.
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12-21-04, 10:53 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
anxiety has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-21-04 10:53 PM.
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12-21-04, 11:27 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
…Every Damn Day… Theres always gonna be a little kid getting in your Way Hes like 12 getting in your face and still has so much to Say The reason he dos this is probably cuz he wants Attention Hes like an annoying brothers ear infection in Detention Caught swearing in your face, now what are you gonna Do Drop him like an little bitch then go to court to sew, not True It’s impossible to sew a 12 year old, it’ll never be Possible Then the next day he walks by yells out words so Absurd Now its about the time your in bed and you hit a Conclusion If the kid really his trying to be cool or if its an Illusion So you think about it for about 2 nights then Surprise You realize and you said so much his brothers in your Eyes Then his brother came after you with his mafia gang Members Then his brother comes out punchin with a blast of Embers His brothers about how many years older then you, your Done I guarantee you didn’t have no fun, so I guess you had to Run A lot of thing you shouldn’t of done, I guess you weren’t Destine But for sure theres lots of people who think that guns are Bustin Don’t listen to them cuz every damn day it happens, ignore Them Try and wake up on the good side of the bed and don’t Listen |
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12-21-04, 11:39 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Every day it's the same shit, i'm drained and anxious... It's so hard all the time with all this pain and anguish... Put shit off to the last minute, and its causin me stress... Another phone call to our house, it's probably death... No matter what time of the month, or day of the week... More pain takes me over, to where it's hard to speak... Taken a shower is an average thing that you do each day... In my house it's hearin a death in the family, then weed blaze... So then i try to get out, like i do every fuckin night... But with no place to go, i realize im stuck in tight... Mom and Dad arguing, gotta listen from the basement... They do this every fucking night, while i sit in amazement... Nothin changes day in or day out it's always deja vu... Even my little brother is starting to blaze up too... I used to try to help the family, but no one was affected... And for trying to be nice I was disrespected... When i lay down to sleep about 12 at night... I think would i care if i never woke to see the light? But i keep going, because i know that im ready and brave... Even though it's the same shit, every damn day... |
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12-21-04, 11:44 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
nice verse...this gonna be close......good luck
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12-22-04, 09:10 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
omg............................................... ..
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12-22-04, 12:15 PM
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I Smacc Booty Emcee's
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This was feedback posted for Parallel
IP: 1BD5 13B2
just checkin da ma fuckin polls.....................
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K.ontroverz.Y ..Audio King Of Rv.. A.uthentik I.ntelligence ..Forever.. |
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12-22-04, 01:23 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Umm... Not much to check.
Upping for you homos to vote. |
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12-22-04, 02:25 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
Voted For: anxiety
A'ight...anxiety got this one for a better topical verse...his topical was just more serious an meaningfull...nice imagery, a very nice flow, and a decent vocab. Parallel...you came a'ight...I wasnt really feelin ya emotion...put more emotion and imagery into ya verses, and you'll do better. No Hate. Return the favor, links in my sig... |
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12-22-04, 03:23 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
Voted For: anxiety
good shit to both but im gonna have to go with anxiety... 1.parallel your verse had a good flow but it wasnt really drawing me in...it got boring and there was a lack of vocabulary that could of been placed to make the lines sound better... 2.anx your verse had good flow and vocab...the words kept me in and made me stay more focused and i thought the flow was better good verses to both overall but i go with anx for more vocab and better flow both imagery was equal i didnt notice imagery like that since the topic didnt really involve it... good luck to both peace
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12-22-04, 04:34 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
thanks.......uppin................................ .......................1
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12-22-04, 04:57 PM
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God is a Fable.
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IP: 9588 E886
Voted For: anxiety
Emotion: Okay i thought that both pieces had good emotion but i felt that anxietys was a little bit stronger then yours parallel... Imagery: Anxiety took this one aswell... His imagery was really great... Nice vivid imagery in this piece it really portrayed a picture in my mind as the story wen along... Could this be piece be based on your life?... Parallel your imagery was good aswell i just wasnt feeling it near as much as i was his... prolly cause i could relate to that when i was his age Creativity: This is pretty much a tie beucaes i felt that both was about real life events and shit but once again ima have to go with anxiety beucaes i relate more to his Vocabulary: Again anxiety took this aswell... His vocabulary was just more complex throught the verse... Vote: Anxiety for taking all the catagorys and obviously having the better piece... |
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12-22-04, 05:03 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
whoa soem real good voters here...im liking the feedback....
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12-22-04, 05:04 PM
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
I think you are in my crew poetic.........................
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