i know ive posted this b4 but ive lenghed it & me n mi gal made it a collab so plz dont sleep on this yall.

life is nothin, livin in fear, unknowning if any1 will know me 2moro,
but 2 moro ill rember u/

everyday i rember the times we had/
wen u went my life went mad/
2moro my love 4 grows stronger/
but i know that i w8 longer/
wen my life ends i know i can say i missed u/
made sure know 1 dissed u/
my soul will c god but not as i am now but as the way he made me/
people say that i want 2 be...../

{emma J}
wot is life?/
life is a guessing game gessin wen we will all die/
life is a skool learn wot u can/
life is tautre life can b wet life can b dry/

rembering the morning after/
i cried worse than a baby/
& wen where mayb ull have missed me 2 mayb!/
battling my way my mind is more confused/
wen we leaft each other i did my body harm by abused/
wen i look through old albums of us 5 always havin fun/
a pocket thresh hold i rember wen me nu fired tha gun/
as the wind wistles ur name im mind & soul weep/
i rember wen we took that leap from boy hood 2 men/

{emma J}
wot is the point/
the point is 2 live/
the point is 2 rember the good things/
the point is makes sure u dont just take make usre u give/

im on this rap thing more now/
but im rappin my h8s & how i miss u, im dedicate my life 2 u/
i wish i would have done more wiv u smoke sum weed/
but i done a few things but ur life will still be my main lead/
momma sed ill meet u again i hope we do/
& then i can say wot we went through/
but untill then ill have 2 breath ur name/
R.I.P my friend & im gonna stick in this game/

uppin

This is nice man...

Imagery was real good, flow was, for tha most part, on point & smooth...

Concept was heavy, easy to relate too...

Good shit overall...

Impressive work fella..

Keep it comen..

Peace n god bless..

thnx man uppin people

Im really feeling this. I felt da emotions man keep up da gud work

thnx man i really apreciated that uppin 4 sum more

aiight drop.... keep it comin..
one

thnx very much holla up @ this odnt sleep ya'll

stop sleepin on the

Nice piece wooshy, vocab could be upped more, try busting on the cypher page, it'll help...
Like the imagery, i noticed a lot of your shits that type of rhyme so try experimenting and doing a piece that isnt relevant from you, like a made-up incident or something, it's be nice to see you pull off some new type shit, one!!!

thnx man ive started 2 get into chyper but thanx much apericated. uppin 4 more votes

im off so uppin

uppin cmon

damn sorry it took me so long to check out ya piece havent been on ina while..

I definitly was feelin it, good concept, and I like the way you ended it.. It had good emotion and pretty good flow... try using more similes and metaphors to add more to the imagry...

overall this was a nice piece though.. Keep spitin and elevatin...


...Peace...

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