Ok......this Is Not Finished Yet At All......i Wrote It Prolly A Few Weeks Ago And It Is Just Part Of The First Verse.....its To The Toy Soldiers Beat.....please Give Helpful Criticism......thanks

If I Ruled The World, There'd Be One Statement I'd Make
It'd Be Blatant It'd State.....end Racism 'n' Hate
I'd Say What I Had To Say, Next Ruler Could Take My Place
You Can Take It How You May, But To Say It I Aint Ashamed
If I Could Spread The Word To The Youth And They'd Actually Listen
But They Dont, And Actually Thats Reality Hittin
And Ive Already Had All The Visions, So The Idea Im Dishin
Is Us Finishin The Martin Luther Mission 'n' <<<( And )
Its Really Not That Far Outta Reach, Lets Stretch Further
If The Practiced Is The Preached, Step Forward, Lets Get Started
Influence Your Kid, Say That We All Brothers
Love Others Of All Races And All Colors
And As The Hate Bubbles, Its Reflected Off Self Image
And Understand Love Rubs Off.....just Spread It 'n' <<<(and)
Just Spread Wisdom, Open Doors, Let The Youth In
Love Is The Word Used In...attempts At A New Revolution....


Thats It...its A Lil Choppy In Parts.....please Leave Helpful Criticism....thanks

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uppin damnit.....helpful criticism please

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...php?t=165166--- read the rules feedback on 2 open mics and put links in thread ...

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Guess who?...

...Paramik Fuckin'...

...Owns You!

oh shit my bad....i didnt even notice that....i will get to that tommorrow...i bout to hit the sack......

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1829225
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1829239

my 2 links!!!!!!!!!!!

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damn...nobody gonna hit this up?????????????????????

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ok Good topic but everyone is beating that to death.

write from ya heart and let it flow forget everything you think you know about freestyling, if you write it wit feeling, you'll be felt. Holla at me and by the way keep elevating

yo im feelin this i really think this shit
was tight could of been betta but good form wha ti been seeing on here

ok thanks for the feed......tell me how i can make it better^^^ dont just say it could be better......uppin for helpful criticism

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