WeZtkoAstin


i jus sit bak ,watch this shit crack
to the westkoast beat that rides on this track
roll up a blunt full of skunk
put the drums way up, let em blow out my trunk
bumpin that shit from round the way
shout out to ill game puttin it down in the north bay

i dont bust gats but i do crack skulls
i make frontas take naps in 6 foot holes
so i suggest u dont fuck wit that
cuz im knockin fuckers out wit my louisville slugger bat

if u think you can take me , ur wrong
cuz im like lance i always livestrong
if u rep da west koast u better throw it down
from frisco to compton back up to sac town

i dont claim for the bloods but i wear alot of red
so do you but its a red dot in the middle of yo forehead
but thats only if u fuck wit me or my crew
indeph,ill game and i against you!

feedback please , it will be returned and greatly appreciated! ~1~


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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170871

dope shit ty im not gonan leave feed cuz u know what i think but str8 dope gr8 job leave feed on me and mevins

I don't smoke so one line made me cry

I felt the multis..bu youl isten to game from g-unit to much nigga

7/10 werd

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not my style, again, but flow is good, I just suggest better content and elevate your vocabulary, but it is crunk, I'll give ya that, some nice lines and a lot of venom to spit, not bad, 6.7/10
would appreciate feedback :
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170569

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Turn off the news and read!

Open Mics

Stealth vs. Ass-as-Sin

you flowed well but u still got dat basic rhyme scheme....u need multies man....ya vocab was basic too..it was decent tho.....6/10

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It was a simple drop, you need to focus more on how you say your lines, like if you think of a line, don't use it, cuz the first thing that pops in your mind is usually undeveloped, work with that line till it sounds completely different but has the same meaning behind it.

smooth flow man. vocab is basic but is laid down well. good roll though

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BUSHCO
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=1882801

Yo get some multis and get more complex. Also increase your vocab

Quit sleepin opn this shit uppin....

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hmm....very good prosepective on the west..im from the west of canada but i can still understand a lil of that mroe then some of these cats...your stucture was kinda weak but your skileld for a newbie....the flow was ight...maybe you coulda been a lil more creative in your lines but not bad seen some pretty kool stuff in a few lines..not the best ive seen but this was pretty good shit....its decent...7.8/10...

return the feed...link in the sig..

the names parallel

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Yo thx for the feed , i cant believe u wrote this this is my exact situatuion eexcept fo i have two sisters not two brothers even the james thing its trippy this shit is tyte 10/10

wups i left feed ion the wrong one FUCK!

uppin..........................................