this is sum shit i wanna get of my chest/
now i may not b the best/
but im labeled wired cuz i dont like rock/
really i dont giv a fuck/
c cuz every where i look some mudda fuckin goth/
stair @ me thinking im rong as thou everyone is off/
like a mouldy fish in a fridge fulla cheese/
but shit this dont change me cuz im still cuz i know about the birds & the bees/
gothic style not me busted ova abuse wen its them & not me/
cuz wot eva i say the pigs will lay down the 3/

{chours x2}
all the biolgical weapons cant hurt me/
cuz im labeled wired/
i have no feelings & the music dont matter/
cuz im labeled wired/

im lyrically contanied/
still no 1 likes me cuz im wearin my chain/
still im hatin so wotcha sayin/
but still im labeled wired & still dont obayin/
the millions of alternative music fans/
label me & us as wired but it hurts so i jus sit there & no ran/
i sit there take it all in, & all i can do is hope that the music get put in a bin/
& hope all u metal heads who read this think im a sin/

holla bac @ this P.S this aint finnished

Yo nice start dawg

thnx man more results

yo is likin hip hop like bein a outcast in england? good start check my collab wih logik

yo tis was aight keep it up and check any of my posts in here

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keep lethal in thy beatin heart/
let thy tactix slip life falls apart/


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honestly you need to work on ya vocab, metas,coomplexiity and so forth..cos in my eyes you lacked

thnx i am workin on it, so cmon uppin 4 more

nice dawg

finish

thnx man

yo man finish this piece, its aight, I no what your saying everyone thinks your into the music to be cool or something, but that just silly idiots who listen to metal and thats what your saying, so to the person who said is it like bein an outcast to like hip hop nah its not,

I was feeling the first verse more than the second.

but im labeled wired cuz i dont like rock/
really i dont giv a fuck/
c cuz every where i look some mudda fuckin goth/
stair @ me thinking im rong as thou everyone is off/

that part was nice,

I would say try and expand your vocab and complexity, this is something I need to work on I think as well.

Could you give my Single Verse piece some feed man.

thnx man ill drop ya a reply uppin 4 more votes

cmon uppin for more

Yeah..you had a good start but theres definately much room for elevation..good start tho..
peace.

thnx peeps