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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Needed Courage
IP: 8D5B 2407
Needed Courage My one chance to talk to you, Face to face, My one chance to have our first real slow glance, My one chance to see your amazing smile that I barely get to see, My one chance to show you my true feelings, But that one chance, I never took, I have all these feelings building up inside, Ready to burst out, But Im just too afraid. What am I afraid of? I'm afraid to loose this friendship we have, I'm afraid that you will never speak to me again, I'm afraid that I won't able to see those angel eyes, But what I'm mostly afraid of, Is your reaction, your responce, Rejection. I just wish that I can build up this courage, The courage that will take away my fear's, Because not knowing how you feel, Is ripping me up inside, Even though rejection will hurt even more then now, Atleast I would not live with regret thinking Maybe there was a chance, All I need is courage, I seem to not beable to find courage anywhere, All I need is courage. 1/07/05 -Dabatos 1.08.05 -Dabatos
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 8D5B 2407
Please give me feedback on this people, and make it good feedback, like explain it, plz...
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: DDD0 0780
Pretty good. Overall I felt that your vocab is aight, not the best. Imagery, not much. Lot of emotion though, and good poem overall. Wow this relates to my life. I was afraid, but hey, it worked for me. I'm going out with her now
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
you use a lot of emotion in that poem, that is good
vocab was ok, keep it up good job |
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 6139 23EA
thanx, really appreciate it.. uppin
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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nice poem man, yea,your emotion was definately shining in this one,more then the words were,but its ok to keep it simple with talking about something we all need,you feel me? great job on this poem, stay up.1
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 212A 5CAC
Thanx for the feed fam.. uppin
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