ayo wat's really good in here...this is my first thread in this section...it's all about multi's baby!! hope u like...give me feed thanx!!


im lyrically
ruinin ur artistic instruments inevitably telekinetically
so hectically u fear my wrath and destructive felony respectively//
I'll unravel twisted rhymes to severe ur outer membrane's felt pain
and then slice each cell,so u never think of doing that again//
im a viscious MC without any moral value,I have a heinous hue
I eat words for breakfast and psychically distort their rightful view//
Im givin ur dreary evanescence a whole new forbidden perspective
That's why I spiritually delete any know members of ur mind's hidden detectives//
every smitten verse is a life-eating,tongue-targeted missile
with words that kill on sight,like giant unstoppable revolving pistols//
the scolded words "ill" and "sick" cant righteously define me rightfully
my tyranny's infamy strictly amounts to too much notoriety//
I purge any issue that's regarding ur surviving tissues
then I hunt all remains, and bury the debris with wrongful tribute//
am like a "penta-hexagon",u gotta combine words just to name me
im more ruthless than wild animals killin their own babies//
i spit "freezing-acid" hotter than the old earth's cold's hurt
that spontaneously combusts ur heart so u can have a "soul search"//
I'll destroy ur role models and soul mates just to console hate,ur old bait,ur flow's old of date
u a slate, ur rhymes are fake, and I lyrically wrecked ur physical state//
u a slave to a page in my rhymebook in a gold cage
am a young sage ripping u apart at a young age,and leaving u on a bloody stage//
I'll shatter ur ribs and splatter ur kids and damage ur crib so u can fathom ur fibs
this free's an ad-lib which means am mad kid,that's an adjective,im spillin my flow hand me a bib//
I got an after-glow that after-shows from burn-out flowz now u know
I dont even show my nose to any foes who flow like corny toes//
The event of my eminence brings back remembrance
now ur irrelevant like unelegant elephants wit elevenses//
Ur presence's essence resents the evidence of my indelible residence
cuz my eloquence is cement like increments for incredible instruments//
Ur rhymes spark unintelligence existence wit "ill" diligence
even my dense fingerprints have more minimum sense//
I left u tense, now ur freestyle's irreverent elements are badly bent//
I left u with a minor dent like I did ur friends prior vent
Next time u'll be in a coma so u can experience life without ur adolescence//
The best vets accidentally confused these rhymes for french
and they didn't even know I was killin them from the bench//
I left u a hobo wit no flow and I wouldn't give u two cents
they should ban me for bein tighter than the screw of a wrench//
My incessant injects could infect ur flows breath at infancy
and instantly bring death with similies without sympathy//
infinately my killing spree intimately bringz indignity
infamously illegitimately while emcees innocently plea//
U irritably meet defeat lyrically when I easily pack heat
I do it strictly illicitly for every enemy with any beef//
Any first word could kill like a death pill when simply standing still
I spit cursed verses that in-check stay in debt wit indepth skillz//
the way I stem sparkles like a gem with the power of ten
I will never die am a legend immortalized wit spoken weapon...

This is tight musik and this is the way I choose to use it
u can be influenced or u can just be stupid
or u can be like eminem and u can "Just lose it"//
either way these rhymes will reach u inadvertently
this is not just rap homie, this is rhythm and poetry//
im freestyling in a cage but when I come out openly
the adrenaline will flow freely through the smoke and debris...

I keep writing while tryin to reach the forever sky
one day I'll get by cuz these words will never die...

hope it wasn't too long!!

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Unknown Legend...

Naw nigwah..that ain't mad, i could type that shit with my toe's...

that's wack!! give a real feedback...pssh!! ...typing with ur toes!!

I know this is good...where's the constructive criticism...tell me what I can improve on not dissin me!!

uppin...

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Unknown Legend...

My structure ehh?? I know what ur sayin...I basically was tryna use big words still, but I do know what they mean...it seems pretty worthless to me now...I'll forget about this trash!! I'll make sumthing that actually has meaning next time...this was just basically like a flow sort of thing...
anyways thanx for feedback abstrakt!!

no more need to read this ppl...

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