feelin the hypnosis like biggie smalls,
beat ya ass like the rock in WALKING TALL,
gang shoot outs in da parkin lot
one pop at you nigga and you'll be DROPPIN LIKE ITS HOT
not only did 50 put lambo doors on da escalade
i did too, but i also put my dick in ya gurl, i consider that gettin LAID
ima have to hit her back up tho, cause the first time i didn't get PAID
you shit is weak nigga, its like corn FLAKES
you'd fit into that group.....oh yea the RAP FAKES
call me the best spitter cause im smarter than you
the lyrics i spit are quick to rip ya heart into two
Veteran status, all you other artists are new
i don't like to pick fights but i've started a few
know how i did that? By sayin FUCK YOU
so fuck off nigga, don't forget what just happened
and next time you lose a battle, try not laughin
because im jpmoney and im back again,
but this time im not here to impress, im here to offend

Wow.....yea it was....yea i uh....it was.......hold on. (deep breath) I couldn't really post an opinion cause it's scheme is so basic and the puns and jokes are kinda weak but.....at some points i was kinda into the rhyme.

call me the best spitter cause im smarter than you
the lyrics i spit are quick to rip ya heart into two
YOU WERE DOING IT PRETTY DECENT
Veteran status, all you other artists are new
i don't like to pick fights but i've started a few
THIS ONE MADE ME LAUGH KINDA
so yea this wasn't bad but i wouldn't drop out of college and start searching for a deal yet. Elevate on your punches and puns, your multiples and keep that style that you seem to bring to your verse and you'll be good.

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Yo, I don't know if that was some kinda hate rhyme toward somebody in specific, but anyway I liked because you were good at makin sense of it and makin it work.
The only thing that bothered me was, the fact that you seemed like u were in a battle, that took away from the whole experience, wondering who u were talkin to.
Other than that It was coo, still a little bit Amatuer, but'chu got potential. Keep spittin dude.

Oh, Almost forgot. Tell me what'chu think of this http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=175477