u are the coldness of winter
to my heat from my fires of hell
ur self-obsessedness attacks
and no longer can one tell

if you are a sex-toy to urself
or just another self-lover
just stop and allow
urself to finally discover

that you arent the best thing
that has hit human kind since water
im sorry for ur parents
that have to call u their daughter

ur just another hoe
who spreads lies like fire on dry grass
for some one who shows it so much
i wouldnt be talking about kicking my ass

cuz i can take u
any day or night
ur nails are useless against me
beacuse u havent seen me fist fight

so stop trying to get with everyone
and get ur head out of ur dream
because u need to realize what u are
and not be what u seem

just the thought of you
makes me angry to the core
u make me so frustraghted
and i want my fists to soar

into ur silicone chest
to rip out a lung
then id reach into ur mouth
so u wouldnt have a tounge

and that way u couldnt speak
and spread those lies u did
and now im sweeping u away
from my life, of u i rid

this was ill a very good descriptive peice about anger. i was feelin the imagery. top notch wordplay on how ya got your content out. peace.

joey

ya nice shit guy strong poem

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was very raw...and....well...extreme....venting the anger to the extreme is what i would say... - keep it cool, find the light within, turn that negative into positive, rise above it... - ...nice piece....respect....

Ay sorry i missed this girl.
Lots of peeps owe you replies on this cuz you never sleep on anyone..Let me first just say, everytime i read your sig i laugh, cuz my cousin always says 'MON-KEY, MON-KEY'..He also has a tendency of yelling 'MONKEY FECES' sparatically thru-out the day..he's 21 by the way..hahha..ok ANYWAY..
This was a good, strong piece..You made it clear what you were feelin and tryna to get across..This showed potential..keep it up girl, keep em droppin.
peace.

joey: thanks for the reply...its greatly appreciated...love to ya

dirtboy69:thanks...and that would be girl, lol... thanks again, love to ya

varentao: this isnt a peice i want to attempt to re-inact in real life... just a piece that i needed to write to get my feelings out... thanks for the reply, love to ya

dagurlremarqabl: lmao.... ur cousin sounds a bit like myself... cept i call people monkey feces.... lmao....thanks for the reply, it means alot... love to ya

wass good son... this piece wass hott. picc droppin em