JUST TO LET YOU KNOW THIS DOESNT HAVE THE WORD NIGGA, GAT, or WEED in it...so it MAY be a little complicated for half of yall to even follow....

J-MuTT = 'Scene', DjX = 'Behind the scenes'

a LiL someThiG DiFFerenT FoR YaLL....FoLLow aLonG


MuTT
I see a mother toakin on a joint around the corner
as she sends her son and daughter to the store for some bottled water
they come back to where shes standing while shes clearing out the ashes
right before she smacks her son for havin cigarettes and a book of matches...
DjX
A look of absence took the adolesence by the hand into depression
Where he slowly spends his days, rotting 'thoughtless at attention'
Morbid sessions force agression on the mouths of younger kids
As his teachers ask his mother where this violent hunger lives
MuTT
from my window i'v seen the shimmering eyes of lovers
holding hands, wispering in their world seemingly ignoring others
but doubt begins to mount, and facial experssions change to gray
as his eyes being to wonder at another feminine figure walking away...
DjX
Thoughtless and crazed his thoughts enforce his ways
It cost him years to fall in love, and in a sec she let it break
Mention death his eyebrows raise, could it be its just a phase?
As his feet begin to dangle underneathe his limp type frame...
MuTT
Iv seen a homeless man, adoned in tattered clothes beggin for food
polity asking passers questions, yet shuned by those he interviwed
somehow considered rude, by those so called civilians
yet how civil is one who taunts thoes who cant afford a ceilin
DjX
As the man endures the feelings, of society around him
Flash backs begin to creep-in, of the wars he has been found in
He fought for freedom, never even, had to second guess his home
So do me this favor.....
sing god bless america as your steppin on his Soul........</center>


UnO.....

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YO I LOVED THAT!!!! I WRITE ALOT OF DEEP STUFF AND EVERY NOW AND THEN I WRITE SOME HARDCORE STUFF LIKE THE POST I JUST DID BUT I PUT MY DEEP STUFF IN POETIC SCRIPTURES....I LOVE THE STORY OF ALL THESE DIFF. PEOPLE IN THERE...THE FLOW WAS ON 2...FINALLY SOMEBODY WITH VOCAB AND FLOW

its not really 'poetical' in a sense...it can definitely be flowed to audio.....we just got 2 diff writing styles.....

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LMAO..

Daaayum, This Had One Of Tha Best Concepts I've Ever Seen..

A Very Dope Collab Indeed..

I Just Wish It Was Longer..

thaks for editing the thread Ndemik....

uno

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I FELT THIS

go find something to do......do you not KNOW what rap is..its poetry retard...

go get a dictionary, look up poetry

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actually go grab a mic and we can do this....

u know the thing that inputs AUDIO into the computer..not your fingers...which inputs text.

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HE IS RIGHT RAP IS A FORM OF POETICS.
USING STANZAS INSTEAD OF PARAGRAPHS TO A RHYTHM STRUCTURE. ALSO THE INCORPORATION OF CONCEPTS AND IMADRY TO CREATE VISUALIZATION THROUGH TEXT.

rapping is puttin poetry to a beat blah, i'ma newbie 'n i know that jeezes.

good peice, I liked it

uppin....can a mod clean this thread up please?...

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Word..Done..

-Tha Next Person To Freepost In This Thread Will Get An Open Mic Deleted-

Damn, this was one of the tightest collabs ive ever read in OM..The whole thing was on point..All of Mutt's parts where tight, vivid imagery, and all of x's translations put everything in perspective..flow was on point too..This was really a tight collab, I could have read lots more on it.
Stay up and keep blessin us.
peace.