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01-27-05, 10:01 PM
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Whys That?
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choices
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choices good or bad the outcome can be devised after the mission is sought But a wise thinker can look ahead and predict what will happen but be sure to define these two,before you choose your outcome forward or backwards unknowen if it will be progress or simply a turn back You gotta trust your heart and sense of reality because theres only a limit on how far back you can go before you end up digging your own grave fuck it,keep going backward's... might aswell bury yourself while your at it yes or no listen the voice in your head, can get you confused but with a wise choice,you will know which is for you spontanious questions can ussually bring the wrong answer or feelings of intimidation,could easily make this choice for you help or let be Why would you walk past someone dieing of hunger then throw you left over sandwhich into the bin whos says your above the next man does money make you better? A helping hand can create another hand to help. left or right Unkowen which is better than the the other but you can usually tell, before you take your direction but if you start to head the wrong way,can you turn round and come back? yin or yang these can be the defining outcome of choices ussualy provoking the wrong outcome everyone has two sides to them bringing out the two diffrent choices make sure you let it be knowen, which one's your true personality |
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01-27-05, 10:06 PM
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IP:
dope man, i like how you broke your words down,and set the tone for each section with headings, it all comes down to choices,dont it? word, this was well written and thought out, nice structure, well done.1
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01-27-05, 10:17 PM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP:
thats all this kid kno how 2 do iz drop dope topics
u sumtin like my hero wit diz shit....lol
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01-28-05, 12:18 AM
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IP:
thanks for the feed.
keep in mind, it is onlyu my third poem. so im still learning. so any advice will help and be much appreciatted. |
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02-02-05, 12:57 AM
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Whys That?
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IP:
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02-28-05, 12:03 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
very good i notice ur at home wit topics of da environment, & life decisions keep up the good work overall it'z a 10/10 u do ur thang wo
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