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FlOw InTeLLiGeNt | 1 | 16.67% | |
Kesse | 5 | 83.33% | |
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03-19-05, 03:09 PM | #1 | |
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Kesse vs FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
IP: 6DE3 D322
Verbal Emotion's Round II
This Is The Second Round For Verbal Emotions..But if you no show you will have your post cut in half. You Must Vote in 2 other battles after you post yours or you will be DQ’d and will have your post cut in half. Check In’s Due Before Tuesday March 22 Verses Due Before Thursday March 25 First to 3 Votes Win’s.. 2-0 = KO 20-30 Lines Max Remember, everything is in Pacific Time. If you do not know what that is then too bad. Topic: Good Fortune Do not complain about the topic, becuase if ya are good topical heads they ya can write about any topic, but if you don't know what the topic means then simply PM me and i will explain what the topic means, but I will not tell you whhat to write about. Also.. First to 3 votes will win.. and I do have the power to close it at 3 votes.. or 2 votes ko -I. Mind Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 03-22-05 at 03:09 PM Must drop verse in 10000 minutes after check in. |
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03-19-05, 04:50 PM | #2 | |
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IP: 0825 899A
FlOw InTeLLiGeNt has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-19-05 04:50 PM.
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03-19-05, 05:18 PM | #3 | |
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Kesse has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-19-05 05:18 PM.
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03-23-05, 10:47 PM | #4 | |
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Do not post your verse here. You must use the form in the first post
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03-23-05, 10:48 PM | #5 | |
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Good Fortune growing up in a small town, where society's overrun by trends all you can do is frown, surrounded by your artificial friends even though it means nothing in the end, they keep wearing their lies no one really has a hand to lend, like cruetly is some sort of prize and everybdoy displays a disguise, the truth might spoil their image no kind, welcoming smiles, just exclusion and long looks of grimace to portray a unique style, is an automatic ticket to loneliness unless you fashion what everyone else does, its like you dont exist but most judge amiss, and take pleasure from causing disruption no need to cut wrists for a world that has been taken by corruption young minds have been poisoned, everyone sorted into different classes some kids getting beat up and robbed for as little as wearing glasses almost fascists, and this kind of treatment should never happen why should you be ridiculed wheather love rock and roll or rappin yet everyones laughing, but violence and hate continue to form were waiting for the calm, but already were engulfed by a storm swimming in arrogance, our brains are fogged with incoherance insensible thought, thinking one is greater, solely by appearance and these are the problems, people you hang with, or the clothes you wear certain dialogue, a different race, sports, even the colour of your hair friend or foe, self-expression shouldnt matter, we breath the same air life is taken for granted, because people would rather be a millionaire adolescence has taught me, as a youth you are constantly delerious so quick to be furious, and taking high school status far too serious now a days, social rank is getting blown way out of proportion too many people are being blinded by the illusion of good fortune
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03-24-05, 02:34 AM | #6 | |
The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 0825 899A
Aiight i didnt know i only had an hour left so i gotta get this done in 50 mins and i use time for topicals but im dope so oh well good luck kes
Life is deminished, Get nothing in return, Only strife for riches My luck ran out the night my wife, Recieved her final kisses I used to play the lottery, Hoping and dreaming for that chance To be able to pull big bills from the pockets on my pants Then my wife got cancer, And God never heard my question Where is the answer?!?! What!.. My life has no progression My fortune ran out, Hospital bills, Rent and mostly gorceries I used to give out money whenever a bum was approcahing me Now im the one on the corner, Wishing someone would give me a buck But relentless time passes, And yet God still hasn't given me luck I choose to let go.. Because there's no possibilty of advancement But with a family, All my desires to die get thrown in the trash-bin And thats when it happened, Hastily my luck turned for the best I won the lottery, No more dead end jobs, No earning the checks My fortune changed, I was once a non-vivacious human being But with my money, Im traveling to the places i havent seen A placement in my dream, Where my family, Can be exuberant And now i can own a house, And never have to screw with rent My life was never sane, From a life wasted, To a man deranged But fortune has filled my days, No more pleading for change No more hustling, Pitiful jobs, Working, Trying to be materialized Because for the first time in my life, There's a glare in my eyes But not a bad essence, Not one that could steal your presence The kind where my family can have presents in a matter of seconds A lavish life, Scandalous stolen items are a thing of the past Luxurious items, Being poor is now a feeling thats passed No more walking the streets, An intolerable man with no vision Heaven seemed so far away, But now it feels less than inches Too bad this didnt occur, I was never born because of abortion But at least this dream, Showed me, Happiness and good fortune
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03-24-05, 03:59 PM | #7 | |
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This was feedback posted for Kesse
IP: 50E1 F494
Shit...nice drops by both of you...
Kesse... That's our home city and a half man...shit... |
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03-24-05, 11:23 PM | #8 | |
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
word........................red bull = not gay....
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03-26-05, 09:34 PM | #9 | |
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
sooo, up this, i guess..............................
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03-26-05, 09:52 PM | #10 | |
Banned: Cheating
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This was feedback posted for Kesse
IP: 8D7E DB81
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03-27-05, 11:56 PM | #11 |
Tight.
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IP: 1768 36E3
Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
Holy fuck this was close. Dont' do that again, make it easier on me next time, and please one of you drop wack. That would make this alot easier. Bastards. I'm going to have to vote, flow. I liked his storyline approach to this, it was simple, but it was complex in it's own way. You both had good grammar, and concept developing. Since flows was a storyline approach it did have more concept developing, well easier to acknowledge ones. Kesse, do not get me wrong yours was dope. This battle completly had to do with my mood, if I didn't just read a book, I probably would've voted Kesse, but I did. Props to both of you for the tight battle. Vote/Flow. |
03-28-05, 12:59 PM | #12 | |
The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 3240 794D
good look on feedback... appreciate it ... upping...
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03-29-05, 07:54 PM | #13 |
.::Outside The Circle::.
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IP: CC3D AFAC
Voted For: Kesse
wow i really think kesse got this, flow i thought ur verse didnt have much content.. u werent saying much just useless little tid bits of info.. your verse was good nice vocab and everything but the emotion just wasnt there.. the only REAL nice part you had was like the last couple lines in italic print... Kesse your verse was pretty nice u had decent imagery.. a pretty good story line.. your still lacking emotion but you didnt do bad.. it seemed like u were over-vocabbing.. but u still had enough to win this with the imagery...
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03-31-05, 01:53 AM | #14 | |
The Original Half Ass King
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This was feedback posted for Kesse
IP: C431 103C
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Very dope battle. No vote...Kesse is ma boi. |
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04-04-05, 07:14 PM | #15 | |
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 3AD2 593D
Voted For: Kesse
This was a very good battle.. kesse.. Whoa!! You hella surprised me with your verse.. I really thought u were gonna come weak but surprsingly you came hard as hell.. This by far is your best verse yet.. You have very good vocab on here, and a pretty good storyline connecting it too life and how good fortune blinds us... Thats something I wouldn't even thought of doing.. well maybe if i tried but i barely do lol.. your structure was pretty nice.. and your flow was on point.. but nice job.. 9/10 Flow: Alright man.. you sorta dissapointed me on this one.. the beggining was sorta weak, but still had pretty good vocab... unlike kesse's... you had way better imagery because you drew a picture of you being in that corner begging for money wen he just talked about how we are blind... your's really wasn't that creative as well because this is something I would of done.. yeah i know you said you had 50 minutes to do it.. (oh n nyce job by the way for doing a good verse within a short time..) but it just wasn't as creative.. The best part too me basiclly was your last line.. 8/10 Vote: Kesse
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