u got the lyrical content, but your not really ridin the beat, and it sounds like when a kid memorizes something in school then does it too quick. but you got the writing ability. You just need to write it more to the beat. You have crazy pen potential, just need to match that up with the beat I give it a C, but you show writing talent.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=179543

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