Look out for the audio remix soon. this is over tha game beat "dreams"

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2019601
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=181484
^^^the links.

"yea man, not everyone get to fufill they dreams, half of us here will never get too. im bout to tell yall some people who didnt get too."

let me tell u bout this girl, characteristics beautiful/
the prime example of what cocaine can do to you/
seen her make a transformation from a pretty young thing/
to lookin like one of the cursed ones on pirates of the carribean/
me and her was straight, no hostility between us too/
shoulda said somethin, i had no idea what she was goin through/
moms gone, pops hit her, and her sister was whacked/
though her sister was a friend of mine, shawty was up on crack/
now, what kinda 13 year old could live in this situation/
its like for her, happiness made a limited visitation/
and when it did her eyes glowed, had red hair and the pretiest faces/
but not a month ago, she had me cryin, singin amazing graces/
came to class one day, coach swayne pulled me outside/
said i dont know how to tell u this, but ya friend mary has died/
and her sister katie was missin, though she had did it and ran to hide/
but she came back, and we found out, she had taken her own life...

sittin on the porch, watchin the dealers sell cocc and weed,
not knowin the destroyin peoples.(dreams)
Null and voiding peoples.(dreams)
straight ignorin peoples.(dreams)
So i rose up to my feet and.(I brought you all my dreams)
(cause i love you...
I love you...
I love you...
I, I, I, I love you)

let me tell u bout this nigga trey Burkes, one of my boys/
couple of rowdy niggaz, together we were always makin noise/
now let me tell u bout his sister, a mother at 17/
the bulge in her belly was the only thing that paused her (dreams)/
but her boyfriend was crazy, you know the wild and rugged type/
but it was all cool, until that night they got into the fight/
slapped her around, pushed her down, then there was i hate u said/
and in less than a second, he kicked her where the baby slept/
when she finally gained the strength, she called her mother up/
and she was there in 60 seconds, im mean Tia was ready to buck/
aint no man gone put his hands on her daughter/
and she was pregnant to add on? that garaunteed him manslaughter/
She pulled up, swearin like a sailor, knife in the right hand/
but she was sayin the right things for the occasion to the wrong man/
see fear doesnt equal respect, gratutude does, fear equals danger/
so a 38 was aimed at his face, and he released his anger...

sittin on the porch, watchin the dealers sell cocc and weed,
not knowin the destroyin peoples.(dreams)
Null and voiding peoples.(dreams)
straight ignorin peoples.(dreams)
So i rose up to my feet and.(I brought you all my dreams)
(cause i love you...
I love you...
I love you...
I, I, I, I love you)

"yea. R.I.P Tia Burkes, R.I.P Mary. Ima miss yall"

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it was alrite but I thought your lines were a little simplistic and wasn't very creative and you got to get an atitude in the verse... nothing really I can relate to in this peice but im'a give you a 7 just because your rhymes are tight.

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