1st thread I replied to... "Heads Up" by Doomsday http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2014399

2nd thread I replied to... We Are Soldiers by lyricalflowz http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2014402




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The Abduction © (Beat by Wez Nilez) http://www.soundclick.com/artassociatez

Beat = fire. Just thought I should mention that since I normally don't speka on beats, but since it's an underground assembly I gotta speak on it. It has a bionic organ sound to it which fits in perfectly with the meaning of the track. Sounds liek it was made with Acid.

The lyrics were hot as hell. The rhymescheme and deliv were something that should be studied by a lot of the cats here in my honest opinion. You know your vocal range and you def milk it for every dB it'll work for you man - good shit. The freeverse at the point where the second verse (and fourth) was good - but if it were written in rhyme it'd have been better (and by "better" I mean more entertaining). The track ends randomly at some point in the second verse (or 4th depending on how you look at it).

Definitely a 'different' track. I think it'd have been better had the account of the abduction it self been in rhythmic format. Sadly, just about no one here will have a mind-set to listen to a track like this. If this rhymed on the account portions, man, this would have definitely got my award for "Different Track that's still fire".

Post more songs.

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the beat was made by me using Cubase VST 32...thanks for the feedback

listening, damn you got kind of an eminem sound to your voice, real similar..................even some of your stuff your saying, its good, your not biting, just being you.....................................you start to get a lil too deep for me at some times, and your on beat kind of, but your stretching some of the big words to fit and it is messing up your flow.....or maybe it is throwing off the way that I am hearing it, like your just talking, and not even rhyming, talkin about space ships and shit, i dont really feel that type shit, not my boat to float, but i mean thats just me, when you come back in rhyming its on point real good, and the vocals are good, i mean like the mix is ok, its just not my type of hip hop, but some kids might feel it, cause your on. the whole idea of the song, is good, i had to listen to it twice, to try and get it, i get it now, and i still dont really like it, but it is different, it isnt the same old guns bling bling hoes and money shit, and i respect that, that shows that you have a brain to think on your own. It's mad different, but dont take this as me downing it at all, I am just trying to be honest 100% on here when i reply. It might be too much for some peeps to get into, but its kool. .....................damn you fucked the alien, you got deep with this shit.............lol, you got a mind deep as a mine, I can't even grade this, A for different shit though, drop some other shit, and make sure i hit it up, I want to see where you go, peace and hip hop, determind


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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2018131

thanks for the feedback

damn dude... i thought u were eminem at first.. the beat is seriously hot as hell man.. i loved the beat.. but damn.. you surpised me like hell by your lyrics.. shyt.. the mulit's, rhyme schem.. was just amazing.. i really liked it.. im looking forward to more man.. 9/10...

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