AYO AYO HERE WE GO/ LIKE A LESBIAN GIRLS GO DOWN ON ME/ I GET MONEY U NEVER COULD CLOWN ON ME/MY MIND PROCESSES LIKE A CELERON /A RAP PHENOMONON LYRICAL GIANT/STAND TALL ON POSITION/BALL ABOVE ALL SMASH ALL COMPETITION/LOOK , STOP,LISTEN/GRAB GLOCKS POP AND GLISTEN/PLAY YO POSITION OR END UP MISSIN/WHEN THEY FIND U WHAT A BLOODY MESS/ FROM A CHERRY TEC/ARE U READY YET/ TO MEET A EARLY DEATH/ HUSTLED FROM A EARLY AGE NOW ME AND MY STAFF LIVE CRADLE TO THE GRAVE/EAST JEFF WHAT I REP HOME OF THE BRAVE/IWENT CORNROWS TO WAVES/ FISTFIGHT TO KAYS/ ANY ISSUES I CALL MY PISTOLS/ AND PLAY RISE AND FLY/ YOU LIE YOU DIE/GOODBYE/

it waz ok fix yo struture
return the favor link in sig
love till death

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please tell me your an alias hopin ta catch a ''vet'' off guard by layin down what can only be said as a JOKE of rhymes, so that the vet bitches at u calls u whack then u go n own him in a battle

if thats not the case wit'chu, Please retire while u still got some dignety hommie..

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...can you say wack?

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..The Council..
7 Day Theory

THAT WAS JUST CRAZY SHIT HERES SOMETHING REAL.I'M SUPERB AND MANIFESTED/THE TRACK I BLESSED IT, HELD AND CARESSED IT/U KNOW ME GAME LIKE A OG/ COLDLY APPROACH 3/MENAGIE/ HOT TUB FROM THE CLUB/PERSIAN RUG I'M SO THUG STILL SHOW NO LOVE/ HEART COLD LIKE SNOW CUZ/ONLY SHOW LOVE TO THOSE IN MY CIRCLE/ YOUNG CATS WHO'LL MERC U BEFORE THEY CURFEW/

it was ok not a perfected rhyme just yet but u just need a lil elevation in ur structure & wordplay...also u need 2 add multi'z in ur pieces but overall it was 6.5/10 just keep working at it & u'll get 2 ur apex in ur writings