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03-17-05, 12:22 PM
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Odi et Amo
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My strength
IP: D8DF 0B27
Been forced to be a fighter from the start Born and raised with such a competitive mind Always craving for a tad of their attention Fears of being alone tortured me each day Locked up inside my sister's obscure shadow And so I promised to myself: "I'll be the best...someday..." That one promise kept me going in this crazy, hectic world Because to win in life, you have to become one of them One of those heartless cruel creatures without morals One of those materialistic assholes without compassion ...One of them... And so I said to myself: "Never look back, only forward" That one sentence brought me to where I am this day Am constantly climbing up the ladder by all means ...Forward, not back... Why bother to look back at those annoying obstacles? Why care about all the lives ruined by my rapacity? And so I convinced myself: "You're doing good, keep going" But deep inside, there is an aching...my conscience... As I gaze in the mirror, I see a bitter ruthless woman Money can provide everything except what really matters Those little green papers cannot fill in the emptiness They cannot turn back time and let me erase my mistakes They cannot heal the pain I caused all these years Nothing can abolish my fears For they have already been realized And so my strength became my weakness
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03-19-05, 11:20 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
nice poem girl, i liked your descriptiveness with your words, nice set up/structure, your vocabulary was right for this, can tell your emotion was with this topic, keep it up.1
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03-20-05, 02:57 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
wow! there she goes again, slow down girl damn u out beatin my ass n shit lol just messin.....dis was by far damn GOOD!!!!!!! good emotion, structure, vocab, da whole 9 yards........uh huh...keep it up girl....1
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03-20-05, 07:08 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 7264 17FB
Thanks for feed
 Much appreciated!
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03-20-05, 02:08 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
damn, this some good stuff
keep it up |
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03-22-05, 11:33 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: ADDB 3113
^Thanks, can I get some more feed please?
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03-22-05, 12:46 PM
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.::Outside The Circle::.
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IP: 9676 FA92
wow babe, u really dropped nice on this one, i dont like the line scheme much but this was still nice..
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03-22-05, 02:57 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: C9A2 1C80
Thanks...
*blushes* @ the babe-part (even though it reminds me of that pig but anyway) DQ
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03-24-05, 12:09 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 9AB5 3E19
Uppity up up
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03-24-05, 12:19 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 964F D870
wow
neva knew my girlfriend had dis in her i need to pay more attention to u baby and dats real *strang love? no* see u when i get home, betta be naked!
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03-26-05, 08:03 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 2674 401F
^Uhm okay then, thanks for feed I guess hehe
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