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In moonlight
IP: 72D1 C1E0
The moon in the sky is waning and fading fast
Swear not by the moon the inconstant moon Just as everything it won’t last But if you wait long enough it will return again to light the night Alone again in the dark with it’s stars Filling some with hope and others with fright It’s the same old moon and just as before It still smiles with its cool and soft face But it is different because it left and it is more It really has no light but only reflects back what it sees On the horizon the fading sun feeds it For the creatures of the night it gives love and frees It brings a new life to that which wasn’t there Revealing the beauty of the earth in a different way It gives rest from the suns glare And down on the earth somewhere far away It reflects off the eyes of one Through the soft water it makes the light play While all are sleeping it drifts silently down Through every tree it dances And spirits through every town It finds its way to one who’s alone sitting in the field Admiring this beautiful site As the moon admires him and to him it yields Soft light that cools and calms and gives love Exactly what he needs Gently flowing from above To tell him that always in this large sky He will always have a friend when other are gone that is Ever changing just like him that will never pass him by
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IP: 284E 601E
Uppn for feed
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IP: 963B DD50
This was a really nice piece.. i liked the basic A,B,A,B Rhyme Scheme it worked well with what you were trying to put down.. the Topic was very well written. You continue to show that u are one of the Premiere RV Poet's, Good Work.. and will u please return the feed on my poem in my sig.. thank you sir. goodbye
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IP: C1B3 89A4
ok, this is nice. would like to see a better structure mayb center it and add a text of like ARIAL or sumting like dat. but heres what i liked
The moon in the sky is waning and fading fast Swear not by the moon the inconstant moon ^^^this, you came out to fast to the point. play yourself into the poem. dont rush into it. The moon in the sky is waning and fading fast Swear not by the moon the inconstant moon Just as everything it won’t last But if you wait long enough it will return again to light the night Alone again in the dark with it’s stars Filling some with hope and others with fright ^^^this type of ryming is messed up. not a very good way of expressing yourself. but its your poem. but you should always rhyme of the second bar. not off the first couplet. It really has no light but only reflects back what it sees On the horizon the fading sun feeds it For the creatures of the night it gives love and frees ^^^this was pretty nnice. but as i said above this rhyme scheme is waldo writing. |
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IP: CF4E 8780
i really really really liked this your style is mine... in alot of ways.. the everyother was a nice rhyme scheme.. and the best part was the honesty in it... nice piece .... o yea props on the basic vocab some people use huge words that ruin the flow of the poem... keep it simple.. nice
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