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03-07-05, 08:25 PM | #1 | ||||||||
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Letter To My First Love
IP: 0AB9 DA0F
Dry those crying eyes babe, they’re frail and dreary. You probably don’t believe me, but I’d give anything to have you near me. Still can’t believe we’ve been together for so long. Glad you stayed beside me, so I could find out where I was going wrong. Expensive gifts don’t mean much to me but money, and I give generously. Seeing you with others still makes me jealous because it’s not me. This isn’t a cry for help, or begging for forgiveness. It’s just the way I am, a young romantic, hopeless. I just wanted to say sorry for the hurt I’ve caused. But I want you to know that forever I will be yours. If a friend is what I’ve got, then a friend I’m going to love. I want to just say thank you for all your love, kisses and hugs. I may have said this before, but I’ll say it again just for fun. I still love you as much now and forever, as when we first begun. I’m telling you this now so you know it’s true, from me to you. Just letting you know that now and forever, I’m going to love you.
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03-10-05, 02:49 PM | #2 | ||||
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yeah this piece is a nice drop i'm surprised nobody has left feed back on it but it'z a short letta neva the less...but u got sum good vocab...structure was nice...i like the emotion cuz it makes those hopeless romantics out there wanna cry lol...but naw overall it was good just wish u would have wrote a lil more 2 not leave people hangin' on 8.0/10 & duke must sure 2 elevate in ur wordplay 4 ur next piece no hate...return the favor in my poem: Wanna Change My Life?? ya dig
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03-16-05, 11:26 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
i liked dis dawg
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03-22-05, 05:13 PM | #4 | |||
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IP: 8166 4B24
real nice deep piece, nice emotion used really felt the emotion keep it up.....
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03-31-05, 02:58 PM | #5 | ||||||||
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IP: 75FE FA18
Thanks for all the feedback people.
I appreciate it.
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04-08-05, 10:08 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 342A DA98
nice peice.. still sorta new and tryin' to figure how to move around in this site. (LoL)
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