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04-02-05, 07:24 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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My Mission
IP: 7F23 8EDF
yo this my first open mic.. 'my mission'...
my presence alone is a blessing from the skies above sending a message of remembrance from eyes of a dove essence of a peasant kneeling at a shrine designed by thugs sentenced to an endless amount of time trying to judge the last chosen one has arrived with a sword of ivory driven by the transpired desires, tired, lord I’m asking why me I’ve amazingly finally broke free from the pillars that bind me to find a tremendous degree of violence residing inside me scarred from the trip through portals flying at a high speed I lead an immortal army of divine tyrants fighting behind me wisely choosing battles while using my sixth sense to guide me at war with old regimes of ancient barbarians and Vikings surrounded by legions of demons bidding their kings liking sightings of magical scrolls written in mysterious writings believing the end is near I find the strength to keep fighting continue moving my forces ahead flooding the gates of Hades it’s said this is where the dead wait patiently for unborn babies who died before there time, and where raised under Satan’s slavery we hastily embellish the castle and we battle swarms of nazi leaders still believing they killed for a reason, fucking scorned flock of deceivers noticed Hitler still preaching unleashed my wrath in the form of beatings personal reasons for mercifully leading men that are hurting and bleeding I’m certain the feelings are preserved in the unlawful and violent killings after the nazi regime we’ll hunt Taliban and any servants still breathing followed by the disreputable catholic priests for attacking our children i also have no respect for the sand people crashing into our buildings and once I’ve rid the underworld of all the copious scum and ignorance I’ll hurriedly focus more on earth’s war torn state in a form of diligence
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04-02-05, 12:40 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 24C7 DC10
tight words man......
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04-02-05, 06:08 PM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thanks homie... uppin more feedback please...
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04-02-05, 07:18 PM
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Get Stomped.
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IP: 1359 748A
yo dope drop liked tha flow,tha structure,your wordplay good drop fam
keep this tyte shit up fam werd
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04-02-05, 07:20 PM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thanks fam... uppin this...
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04-03-05, 08:06 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
upppppppin thissssssssssssss
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04-04-05, 09:40 PM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
upppin feed plz......
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04-04-05, 10:18 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
This was pretty good, its decent
Not the best that ive read but not the worst either... Your wordplay was okay but enxt time try to use bigger words... Try to use alittle more emotions and feeling ... your structure was good , and really easy to read overall keep it up, and elevate you'll be fine Ps  rop a link to an OM' you have left feed back on or this while be closed
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04-05-05, 12:19 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
left feed back on......
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2069264
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04-05-05, 06:37 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
yo uppin feed please.....
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04-05-05, 07:33 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: CD98 49E3
yea this was a nice piece, I like the vocab as well n it had a kind of poetic feel to it.
overall i thought it was a dope drop man, i dono y bones telling ya ta elevate ya more or less there wit a piece like that. peace! could u rtf by voting on ma battle man coz noone wants to vote lol. |
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04-05-05, 08:09 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
yeah aiight homie.. ill do that tommorow.....
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04-05-05, 02:36 PM
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in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
bahh, i didn't like what your mission turned out to be, fighting hitler and all that, first half was pretty good actually, vivid, packed with emotion, great imagery, picked the vocab nicely and you didn't overdue it, but i kinda fell off with the story........got a talent for writing, keep up
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04-05-05, 08:17 PM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thanks homie.. yeah thats coo
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04-05-05, 08:42 PM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
upppppinnnnnnnnn
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